English argumentative wirting

Ich gehe zurzeit in die 9. Klasse eines Gymnasiums und ich habe eine 5 in Englisch. Daher würde ich mich sehr freuen wenn ihr mir bitte folgenden Text korrigieren würdet. Könntet ihr mir bitte folgenden Text korrigieren:

Today nearly every kid under 13 years has an own smartphone. But is that good for the kids? Some people say smartphones are good for kids and their developing. There are some people saying the kids should learn the technic of smartphones in young age for example to learn for their future job or for school. The childrens could learn in this age how impotant and useful the internet is for example they could learn for school by games and websites like togolino.de. Other people think the childrens in this age could learn for school in smartphones for example with apps. However tere are other people, thinking the comletly opposite. This people have the suspicion that the children could visit websites where they are still under age for example a child could go to a website for pornographic or violency things. The kids should not become an own smartphone because kids in this age should play outside with real friends and not with virtual friends in games for example a kid which is going outside to play is more social than a kid which is sitting all the day at home. When parents pay so much money for a smartphone the kid could lose it for example in sandpit. After looking at both sides I think there are mor disadvantages than advantages for having a smartphone under 13 years. That`s why children in this age should not have an own smartphone. In my opinion parents who buy a smartphone for a child are stupid and irresponsible because they damage the life of their own child.

Englisch, Schule, Englischunterricht, Erörterung, schlechte noten
Aufsatz über Ferien in Englisch

Hallo! Ich muss in Englisch einen Aufsatz über die Osterferien schreiben. Wir sollen auch ein paar Bräuche erklären. Ich bin in der 9. Klasse. Ich würde mich sehr freuen wenn jemand für mich Korrektur lesen könnte! Ich bin auch über weiter Anregungen sehr dankbar! Bis bald Bianca :)

My Easter holidays

I spent my Easter holidays at home and in Gran Canaria. The holidays were from the 18. April - 04. May. On Maundy Thursday my family and I look for easter nest. In Germany there are many easter customs. For example hide the parents small Easter nests on Maundy Thursday or Easter Sunday for their children. Then the children go usually into the garden and look for their little gifts. In my nest was some money, sweets and a bracelet. God Friday was our first holiday day. I made with my mother some preparations for the weekend because related visited us. We ate and talked a lot .On Easter Monday my family and I visited my grandparents. To eat, there was a roast hare. To easter each family eat different things. After that we made ​​our „Osterspaziergang“. This is a traditional walk. In the evening we visited my uncle because it was his birthday. The next three days I was sick. I had a hefty cold. The Friday and Saturday we spent by my cousin in munich. We celebrated were shopping and have eaten a lot. Saturday night my family and I flew to Gran Canaria. The flight lasted five hours. Here I spent the rest of my vacation. The sun has shining every day and it was 30 degrees hot. We were in a large hotel with five pools. The food also tasted very good.It was not far to the beach. We were swimming in the sea every day. Sometimes we were shopping. Monday morning we are flew back home. I had wonderful holidays but they were over too fast.

Englisch, Aufsatz, Rechtschreibung

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