Blog comment korrigieren: bitte helft mir, die hausübung wird sogar benotet?

Hallo, das war die Angabe (Nummer 11):

Könnt ihr bitte meinen Blog comment korrigieren, umschreiben, alles was geht, damit es ein guter text wird? ich würde mich echt freuen, es wird sogar benotet, bitte hilft mir dabei:

Hi Artsy Tiger,

there is a difference between spray painting and vandalism. If your friend use to paint an wall, which is not someone’s property, then it is not viewed as vandalism. However, if he painted for example a school or a market wall, can be considered as a crime and it may also carry consequences because of damaging the property belonging to others without permission. It is important to respect other people’s property and seek permission before making any changes on it, like spray painting. 

So, as already mentioned and also according to the law, spray painters painting on public property without permission is considered illegal and can result in serious consequences for the artist. I guess, your friend was not properly informed about this and didn’t do it on purpose, maybe for fun. I mean, spray painting is also a form of art, just not the typical type of art. I can imagine that they are doing it from their heart, let their voices hear and from the experience of something that really impacts them like your friend, who painted his “world” on the wall.

By the way, there are many crimes in general considered worse than spray painting, such as violent offenses like assault or murder, which can cause physical harm or death to others.

I don’t know if it was fair though but I hope that your friend gets released as soon as possible!

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Ich musst diese Bullet Points einbinden:

  • Die Wichtigkeit des Themas erklären.
  • Die negativen Dinge über Autofahren.
  • Die positiven Dinge über Fahrradfahren, Öffentliche Transportmittel, Zufußgehen.
Have you ever thought about, what you can do to effectively protect the environment? Everybody can reduce his/her carbon emissions every day.
 
As a student, I study about climate change every day at school. It is obvious that our planet is in danger. Many people think there is nothing they can do on their own to protect the environment. But that's not true! Everybody can do his/her part. For me everything starts early in the morning. Instead of driving to school in my car, I use public transport.
 
Do not get me wrong, but many people prefer going by car not without reason. Of course, it is more comfortable than, for example, riding a bike. However, many people forget about the environmental consequences. Also, a bike or bus ticket is much cheaper than a car. Moreover, driving a car is not healthy for the body.
 
Considering the fact that there alternatives, like cycling, public transport or walking, it doesn’t make sense to drive with a car anymore. On the one hand all of these alternatives are better for the environment, on the other hand there are much more positive aspects about those. When you use public transport, you can talk to other people. When cycling, you can see much more of the surroundings. Actually, my favorite way to travel is on foot because you can relax right away.
What is you opinion on that? How do you travel?
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