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Geschichte schreiben?

Hallo ich muss eine geschichte schreiben für die schule und zwar im thema Gothic Literature das ist was ich soweit habe:

The Face

I lay in my bed in the eerie midnight dreary, with my wife beside me while she read “A tale of two cities”. Outside the rain was hammering down and once in a while thunder sounded. The fire crackled in the wind that entered through the gap of the window. Every once in a while you hear raven’s shrill shriek screech, as it is tring to flee from the horrid thunderstorm. I glanced at the gloomy moon that lit up the room through the curtains. The murky moon was the only light source that kept shapes regocnizeable, as the candles were flickering and soon showed no sign of light. 

The bed creaked as I gradually turned around to wish my love, “Good night.” The light of the deep silver moon taking one's time passed the house, and the room fell into deep darkness. I quickly dozed off into deep slombering.

There was an ear spliting screach echoing through the house in the dead of the night. I wanted to grab for my wife, but she wasn’t there. My heart sank and my eyes widened, I fell into a state of schock. I suspected horrid things, as I leaped for the door and slammed it open. It felt like I did the greatest long jump down the stairs. But it was too late. There was no sign of her anymore other explanation for me than that my love was taken away. I knew I had to find this horrid creature who dared to take her. I screamed,”Elenor!” but no reply.

I went back up the stairs in deep sadness but also in such anger. I asked myself “What will I do now,” or “Will I ever see my love again.” It felt like an eternity until I reached the top of the steep stairs. When I did I colapsed onto the bed falling trying to process the schock I don’t remember properly but it was maybe 4-5 am and I just layed there like a dead body until it was about 7 am.I decided to slowly proceed down stairs and grabbed myself some cereal and threw myself onto the well worn couch. 

When I turned around and looked outside there was a face, a face that stared deep into my soul through the morning dawn, with eyes that were as white as snow and the body was covered in a black coat as black as his soul I supposed. It rapidly came into my mind that this might be the creature of horror that took my wife. I rushed through the pitch black kitchen and grabed the largest knive I could find. I wanted revenge, but not any one wher he could never get me back.

When I came outside there was nothing, it had disappeared. It vanished into thin air with no sign of it, it was gone. I looked around for a few minutes but still no sign of the beast. Fustrated, I back inside.

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Und ich habe mir vor geschtelt das er dieses Gesicht noch weitere male sieht und er dann ganz paranoid wird und dass dann im ende das Gesicht ihm umbringt werend er schläft und die frau sieht das durchs Fenster und rent weg in denn Wald und dass die Geschichte dann so interesant ended dass sie wegrent und man sich dann so fragen stellt.

Es wäre sehr nett wenn mir jemand helfen könnte die Geschichte fertig zu schreiben

Danke im Voraus

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Englisch?

Könnte jemand eventuell einen Blick über meinen Englischtext über das Praktikum werfen (besonders bezogen auf die Grammatik) ? Das wäre echt lieb, danke!

When I arrived at my old primary school today, I went to the secretary to see in which classes I had to go. A lot of teachers were there who greeted me in a very friendly way. Then I got a timetable on which I could see where I had to go. The first lesson was in class 3b at 7:45 a.m. The class teacher was called Mrs x. She told me to help two students at reading and writing who didn’t speak German at all. At first it was quite difficult because they didn‘t understand me well and I wanted to teach them how to write s, m and o and how to read some words. Therefore, I tried to speak in English and make signs so that they would understand me better. It actually worked and they managed it to write the letters and read some of the words! It was really fun because they were so cute and they always listened to me and respected me. In the second lesson which began at 8:40 a.m., they had maths where I tried to teach the girl multiplication of the number 2 and it worked really well because she always understood me when I said something. I tried to teach the other boy the addition of numbers and he also understood me. At first it was pretty difficult as I said, but then it got easier and easier! At 9:45 a.m, the first break began and I went to the teacher‘s room to talk to teachers. They asked me a lot of questions, for example, what my name is or which school I go to. Everyone was kind. When the break was over at 10 a.m, I should go to class 3c which is taught by the class teacher Mrs xy. They had science and the topic was potatoes. I should help two students at completing exercises in their book. They had to match pictures to expressions which were about potatoes and so on. It worked well. There weren’t many exercises to do. Again, they were very kind and loved spending time with me. Then, the second break began at 10:50 a.m where I went outside to get some fresh air. Suddenly, a lot of students came to me and asked questions. It was so cute and stressful at the same time because you had to answer to a lot of questions in a short time. After that, a girl came to me to tell me about people who were on the climbing wall without any permission and she wanted me to tell them they should get off the wall. That‘s why I went to the wall and told them to get off and they listened to me. By the way, they should get off because it was wet to avoid accidents. Apart from that, I was walking in the school yard while I was watching the students which were playing. After the break, I didn‘t really have to do anything because the class teacher of class 3c only explained a lot of things about the school, so things which had nothing to do with lessons and so on. After that, I had another break where I went to the teacher‘s room to ask some questions about the job, such as the advantages and disadvantages. She answered them very clearly which made me happy because I could think  better about whether the job is perfect for me or not. I came to the conclusion that the job would be suit me! Then, at 12:45 PM I had to work in the school cafeteria to have the control about the children’s behavior and to lay the table. Next, the students of class 1a had P.E. at 1:45 PM. They really wanted me to play games with them which made me feel very comfortable and happy because they enjoyed spending time with me. It was very fun because the students were really funny, lovely, and cute. In the last lesson, so at 2:45 AM, we went back to their classroom and played games again. I also resolved disputes, for example, someone judged the other one without any reason. That‘s why I talked to the person and said it was not okay and he should not do it again. Luckily, he listened to me. In the end of the day, it was a very funny day and I loved spending time with the students there because they are very cute and I think the job suits me very well!

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Wie findet ihr die Short Story?

Kann man das so schicken? (Englisch LK 11/2)

Title: “Happier than Ever“

I grew up watching the world from the sidelines. I learned when I was young that the world is just like a big cafeteria table I was not welcome at. I was an odd child- to say the least. Making up my own stupid little songs. Cutting myself bangs with the scissors I found in Mom’s drawer. Walking up to people when they’re sad and hugging them silently. An odd child- to say the least. It didn’t get me many friends. Obviously. The one friend I had was just as pathetic. So embarrassing. Honestly. I’m glad we grew apart. She’s still walking around with stupid sunflower clips in her hair. She’s still humming that little song we made up as kids. She’s annoying. Honestly. She thinks people like her for “who she is.” She has like 2 friends. Who would listen to her? She said I changed. She said that “I’m not being myself anymore“. But I know better. I didn’t change, I adapted. And that way I will be more successful and happy than her. 

It is the night before the new school year starts, so I lie down in bed, close my eyes and let the thoughts flow.

You must make friends. Do whatever it takes. It doesn’t matter if you’re not being yourself. It doesn’t matter if you’re uncomfortable. Do you seriously want to spend your school years all alone? Is that really what you want to happen? Wake up to a million spam emails yet not a single message from a friend? Not a single missed call? Not a single message asking “Are you coming today?” Is that seriously what you will let happen? No. Pull yourself together and fit in. You must fit in. If you don’t you’ll be an outcast again. No one will sit next to you in class. You will spend your breaks alone waiting for them to end while the others wish they’d never do. You will watch everybody laugh. Watch everybody hang out. Everybody be happy.

You must fit in. It doesn’t matter what it takes. Remember 7th grade? I’m sure you do. Do you want to repeat that cycle? Is your life just one long pitiful cycle? A cycle of being excluded, tolerated, yet not wanted. Accepted, yet not wished for. It’s pathetic how hard you’re trying. How hard you’re trying to be someone else, yet still manage to fail. But this time will be different because you realized something. Nobody is being themselves. Nobody. Then why should you be? It’s embarrassing to think anybody cares about your true self. Honestly. All those TV shows are making you delusional. Stop believing in that stupid fairytale where anybody cares about who you actually are. You are just a character to be played. Don’t play it the right way and you will end up alone. Do you want that to happen? No. Think about how much better everything will be. You will be happy. You will never be lonely again. Never again. People will look up to you. Admire you. Maybe even envy you. Every single day will not feel like a burden. You will not feel like a burden. You will stop being a burden. People will love you for who you are. Even if it isn’t the real you. The real you was always cut out to be a loser anyway. To be an outcast and alone. To be a pathetic nothing who no one likes. If you don’t want to be that person anymore then read your stupid books in private. Watch that stupid show in secret. No one cares about it anyway. Stop talking so much about things no one cares about. Do you seriously think the world revolves around yourself? Are you seriously that pathetic? You narcissist. It’s funny, hide that. Now think. What do they want to hear? What do they expect from you? Is it coolness? Nonchalance? Funniness? Whatever it is, you must be it. Don’t show yourself. You must fit in. People will expect different things from you. You must be versatile. Be whatever they want you to be. Be yourself in secret.

“Have a nice day too.” I smile back softly to my dear friend as I go home and lie down in bed. I look at my phone. 2 missed calls, 12 new messages. Perfect. A hard day of fitting in. Totally worth it though. I have friends. I’m fitting in. I’m amazing. Happier than ever. I finally feel… empty? Whatever. Now I can be myself. 

But when I look into the mirror I don’t recognize my self. Was she right? 

And now the lights are off, the chairs are empty and I’m all alone. No one is watching, yet why do I keep acting?

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