Wir haben in der Schule die Geschichte "Roses and Mobiles" gelesen.
Nun sollten wir eine art Personenbeschreibung schreiben.
Da wir kaum etwas dazu besprochen habe,gerade was formalien etc. angeht,
bin ich leicht ahnunglos.
Bitte bewertet den folgenden Text nach Inhalt/Sprache/Grammatik
Dennis Stawiarski Portrait of Nick 16.03.12
Portrait of Toni
The person,I want to tell you about is Toni.Her fullname is Toni Goddard and she is
Australien.Toni is a character in the story "Roses and Mobiles".
She works in a flower-shop as a flower-seller.Toni has got a fiancé ,called Martin.
She falls into love with Nick.
Toni seems to have a beautiful smile and a pair of shinning eyes,because Nick says so.
Furthermore her fiancé splits up ,because Toni and her Fiancé had problems with their relationship.
Additionaly She falls in love with a guy,called Nick ,who is working in an electronic department store.They get to know each other at her work,when Nick bought some roses for his sister.
Finally Toni seems to be a breathtaking young lady.
Falls euch Verbesserungen ,was Formulierungen bzw. Zeitformen etc. angeht einfallen,
bitte ich drum diese zu posten.
mfg und vielen dank im vorraus ,
Dennis S.