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Könnte sich eventuell bitte jemand meinen Text durchlesen und auf die Grammatik vor allem schauen? Danke!
,,I had been at school in X before I came to Y and it had been terrible in X. I didn‘t have any friends there because there were a lot of groups which were formed and some of them talked about me. I was left out by my "best friend“ who replaced me by someone else and that is how everything started. All of my classmates were mean to me and even the teachers were against me except my maths teacher. I don‘t know why they did that. Honestly, I was a very shy person, so I only talked to people who I felt comfortable with. I think that was the reason. I found new friends from other classes but as soon as my classmates knew that I had found a new friend, they came to them and told something about me, so I was lonely again. They did that for about 5 times but I still don‘t know what they told about me. I only know that they didn‘t want to talk to me anymore after my classmates had told them something about me. Obviously, it had to be something bad that was the reason for not talking to me. On 1st December 2021, it was even worse the girls of my class came together and they formed a circle in which they talked about my and made prejudices. Yet I still don‘t know what they exactly told about me because I only heard my name for multiple times and while they were talking about me, they often looked at me. Therefore, I decided to ignore them until I would leave this school. It didn‘t matter what they said, I completely ignored them. Of course I couldn‘t ignore my teachers who were also mean to me but at least I didn‘t speak to my classmates. On 31st January 2022, I was finally allowed to leave that school and came to this school where I have been since then.“
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"I had been at school in X before I came to Y, and it had been terrible in X. I didn't have any friends there because there were a lot of groups that were formed, and some of them talked about me. I was left out by my 'best friend' who replaced me with someone else, and that is how everything started. All of my classmates were mean to me, and even the teachers were against me, except for my maths teacher. I don't know why they did that. Honestly, I was a very shy person, so I only talked to people with whom I felt comfortable. I think that was the reason. I found new friends from other classes, but as soon as my classmates knew that I had found a new friend, they went to them and said something about me, so I was lonely again. They did that about five times, but I still don't know what they said about me. I only know that they didn't want to talk to me anymore after my classmates had told them something about me. Obviously, it had to be something bad that was the reason for not talking to me. On December 1st, 2021, it was even worse as every girl in my class came together and formed a circle in which they talked about me and made prejudices. Yet, I still don't know exactly what they said about me because I only heard my name multiple times, and while they were talking about me, they often looked at me. Therefore, I decided to ignore them until I would leave this school. It didn't matter what they said; I completely ignored them. Of course, I couldn't ignore my teachers who were also mean to me, but at least I didn't speak to my classmates. On January 31st, 2022, I was finally allowed to leave that school and came to this school where I have been since then."
Dankeschön!! :) Aber von den Tenses und so her war nichts falsch, oder?