Hallo, weiß einer wo genau (einfach erklärt) im englischen der unterschied zwischen erörterung und comment liegt??? Wenn ja, kann jemand den kurz erklären???

Danke

Hallo Leute, das Niveau ist 10. Klasse Gym. Ist für eine Schulaufgabe.

Die Frage: Write a comment in 150 words. Should video games be forbidden?

Hier mein comment:

It has often been said that video games have bad influence on people who play them. For example, it has often been argued, that Kids in school are less concentrated if they are playing computer games. In the following I would like to point out, should video games be forbidden?

In my opinion video games shouldn´t be forbidden. This is simply, because video games are not the source of these problems. It´s true, that if you let your child play video games the whole day, it has huge negative effects on it, for example lacks in social connections. But this is the fault of the parents. Kids shouldnt be allowed to play the whole day, this completely seperates them from the reality, but it´s ok if they play here and then.

Another reason why video games should be allowed, because it´s fun playing them. If you play a video game, you can do things that you won´t ever be able to do in real, for example flying around without nothing but your body. Every game is a different adventure, that you can share with friends. Every different person can find something that he likes, no one comes short, even business-man can find games that fit for them.

So to sum up, video games are a nice experience. The key is not overdoing it. Or you will end up living in a virtual world.

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Wie findet ihr es? Bitte alles verbessern was geht :). Danke.

Hallo, ich soll in Englisch mein erstes Comment schreiben. Es wäre supernett, wenn ihr euch es mal durchlesen könntet. Über Verbesserungsvorschläge( also Formulierung oder Rechtschreibung oder auch noch einen Pro/contra Punkt den ihr wichtig findet oder etwas anderes) würde ich mich sehr freuen ;) Das Thema das wir vorgeschrieben bekommen haben war: Rules in our everyday life

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Rules are a very important thing in our life. I believe it´s very important to discuss this topic. For everything in our life we have rules, for example speed limits or curfews. But, are we too obsessed with safety in our everyday life? Or have we got too few rules?

Rules for speed limits for instance are very important. If there are not rules for that, life will change. Everything will be very dangerous. Everybody would drive as fast as they want and there would be more accidents.
Another pro is, that without rules you will early be dead, there will be too much risk in our everyday life.
But there does not only exists pros, on the other hand there are also cons. Without the rules we will have more freedom. We would have much more fun with fever rules.
Secondly there are too much rules for teenager. It is tempting to break them and the teenager can not have so much fun as without rules, because they are not allowed to stay all the night long at partys or to go late in the cinema.

To my mind, most of the rules are very important in our everyday life and we have not got too few rules and are not obsessed with safety.

also ich muss ein comment schreiben....aber ich habe keine ahrung was ich als einleitungsatz schreiben könnte...finde auch keine i-netseiten bei denen beispielsätze stehen.....findet ihr vielleicht ein paar oder kentn ihr welche oder hab t ihr i-welche Vorschläge?

achja ein comment ist ungefähr eine erörterung halt nur auf englisch

danke

ich habe ein comment über gloabel warming geschrieben...brauche ich für eine englischarbeit. Ist das comment so okay und das englisch? Habe es mit einem Freund geschrieben..

The question of global warming has long been a point of argument between scientists. Are we really threatened? Is mankind purposely destroying our planet? If so, is it too late to save it or is the climate change natural and outside of our power to change? Is it just a conspiracy? I will answer these questions in the following paragraphs.

One reason to worry is the fact that through global warming the Arctic glaciers are melting and causing the loss of the natural habitats of natural wildlife of the area such as the polar bears. But the opposite is true, the polar bear population has grown from 5000 in 1950 to approximately 25,000. Through this we can clearly see that the polar bears are not in danger of becoming endangered species. How are things looking with our atmosphere? Through the enormous amount of carbon dioxide being produced by our factories, as well as our wasteful lifestyles, many scientists claim that we have increased the size of the hole in the ozone layer. They are blaming mankind for putting so many pollutants into the troposphere which is causing the planet the heat up.

Habe keine Zeichen mehr frei, deswegen kommt die Fortsetzung als Antwort.