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The advantages and disadvantages in an exhibition as a company for aircraft manufacturers
Einleitung: In this comment, I will discuss the pros and cons of presenting one’s own company at an exhibition.
Hauptteil:
+ In the first line, its good for the company, that they can quickly make contacts fastly, for example by exchanging the data when talking to customers.
- Possible drawbacks include that after a customer conversation everything must be keep up to date so that the customer does not disappear quickly. And for that you also need time.
+ Technically speaking, the team is better able to present they product. An example is, that they can show the Engines at the same time and Place.
– When planning to appear at such events, companies should not forget the heavy things, which needs to transported. All this will cost many energy and time. Such as all the engines are lightweigt for an airplane, but not for the employer.
+ Its an easy way for the company, to make advertisment. For example telling them the benefits from the company, such as lightweight, sustainable etc.
– At the same time, there is great competition and leads to competitive pressure, as most similar companies are also at such an event.
Schluss: In my opinion it doesn't really worth it to be at an exhibition, all the nerves, losses time and the pressure etc. I would think about that two times. Maybe only if I have enough time and the desire to do that.
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Hallo,
The advantages and disadvantages in (Präposition) an exhibition as a company for aircraft manufacturers
Hauptteil:
+ In the first line, its (Grammatik) good for the company (kein Komma vor that) that they can quickly make contacts fastly (doppelt-gemoppel), for example by exchanging the data when (Grammatik) talking to customers.
- Possible drawbacks include that after a customer conversation everything must be keep (Grammatik) up to date so that the customer does not disappear (Wort) quickly. And for that you also need time.
+ Technically speaking, the team is better able to (Ausdruck) present they (Grammatik) product. An example is (kein Komma) that they can show the Engines (RS = Rechtschreibung) at the same time and Place (RS).
– When planning to appear at such events, companies should not forget the heavy things, which needs (Grammatik) to (Hier fehlt ein Wort.) transported. All this will cost many (Grammatik) energy and time. Such as all the engines are lightweigt for an airplane, but not for the employer. (???)
+ Its (Grammatik) an easy way for the company (kein Komma vor Infinitive) to make advertisment (Ausdruck).
For example telling them the benefits from (Wort) the company, such as lightweight, sustainable etc. (Das ist kein vollständiger Satz.)
– At the same time, there is great competition and (Wort) leads to competitive pressure, as most similar companies are also at such an event.
Schluss: In my opinion (Komma) it doesn't (Grammatik) really worth it to be (Ausdruck) at an exhibition, all the nerves (alle Nerven?), losses (Grammatik) time and the pressure etc. I would think about (Ausdruck) that two times (Ausdruck).
Maybe only if I have (Grammatik) enough time and the desire to do that (Wort). (Das ist kein vollständiger Satz.)
Das Fettgedruckte muss korrigiert werden. Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.
Für das Vokabular und die Rechtschreibung empfehle ich ein gutes (online) Wörterbuch, z.B. pons.com,
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:-) AstridDerPu
Ich finde deinen Kommentar gut. Der Aufbau ist sehr klar und die Argumente verständlich. Hier einige kleine Verbesserungsvorschläge:
- In der Einleitung könntest du noch etwas mehr auf die Relevanz des Themas eingehen, warum z.B. Messen für Flugzeughersteller wichtig sind.
- Im Hauptteil schreibst du manchmal "everything must be keep up to date", hier wäre "must be kept up to date" richtig.
- In den Punkten zu Vorteilen und Nachteilen könntest du noch mehr auf spezifische Herausforderungen von Flugzeugherstellern eingehen.
- Der Schluss könnte noch etwas persönlicher sein, vielleicht einen Satz ergänzen, warum du persönlich weniger Stress haben möchtest.
Insgesamt eine sehr gute Arbeit!