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Many people argue whether or not the British monarchy should be abolished.

In the following, I present arguments for and against a monarchy so that you can form your own pinion.

On the one hand, the British monarchy should be abolished because a monarch only rules but has no real political power or function. this means that a queen or king is unnecessary and unimportant to the state.

Also, the UK is not a democracy, as is claimed, because in a democracy people can elect the head of state, but since the royal family is still alive, they will continue to be the head of state.

This is very unfair and unequal to the rest of the population.

Also, people can never be 100% sure if the next monarch is good for the state and does not have bad intentions.

This could make people very worried.

Another important aspect is that the royal family spends a lot of money on the palace when they could use the money for more important things.

On the other hand, the British monarchy should not be abolished, because a monarch is very important even if he or she has no real political power.  

His or her importance is reflected in national stability.

Since a monarch embodies the British history, values and tradition, this leads to stronger national identification, which brings people closer together so that there is national stability.

In addition, members of the royal family are very important to charities, because since the royal family has a good image and is important, charities can be heard better, so they continue with their charities.

Some people may think that a monarch spends a lot of money, but that doesn't mean a president doesn't.

there are many presidents with many

There are also many presidents with many offices, even more than the British monarch.

The fact that the royal family has always been at the head of the state means that people trust it because they know its good intentions.

This means that the monarchy is in safe hands, so to speak.

Another important point is that the royal family has shown that it can modernize and adapt to the times.  

This is very important because many people claim that they are unmodern and have different thoughts than today.

But the Queen, for example, has allowed her son Charles to marry a divorced woman, whereas in the past this was a very dangerous issue. 

that means she was able to “modernise”. 

Weighing the pros and cons of the British monarchy, one can say that it should not be abolished because the British monarchy has been very successful, mainly because it has adapted to the times and modernized.

Answer 1

[einetassetee]

Es ist ziemlich gut, allerdings sind da noch einige Fehler:

• kleine Satzanfänge
• Punkte an den Satzenden vergessen
• trust schreibt man mit „in“, ( trust in)
• opinion statt pinion

Answer 2

[Adrian2612]

Ich sehe einige kleinere Fehler in dem gegebenen Kommentar. Hier sind einige Vorschläge, um sie zu beheben:

• In dem Satz "Also, the UK is not a democracy, as is claimed, because in a democracy people can elect the head of state..." sollte "as is claimed" durch "as some claim" oder Ähnliches ersetzt werden, um klarer zu machen, wer die Behauptung aufstellt.
• In dem Satz "This is very unfair and unequal to the rest of the population" sollte "and unequal" durch "and unequal to" ersetzt werden, um korrekte Grammatik zu gewährleisten.
• In dem Satz "This could make people very worried" sollte "very" durch "even" oder "really" ersetzt werden, um den Satz stärker zu machen.
• In dem Satz "On the other hand, the British monarchy should not be abolished, because a monarch is very important even if he or she has no real political power" sollte "he or she" durch "they" ersetzt werden, um die korrekte Mehrzahlform zu verwenden.
• In dem Satz "His or her importance is reflected in national stability" sollte "His or her" durch "Their" ersetzt werden, um die korrekte Mehrzahlform zu verwenden.
• In dem Satz "This means that the monarchy is in safe hands, so to speak" sollte "so to speak" durch "in a manner of speaking" oder Ähnliches ersetzt werden, um den Satz besser zu strukturieren.

Insgesamt ist der Kommentar insgesamt gut geschrieben und bietet eine umfassende Betrachtung der Vor- und Nachteile der britischen Monarchie. Einige kleinere Korrekturen könnten dazu beitragen, die Klarheit und Grammatik des Textes zu verbessern.