Kann jemand meinen Text überprüfen? (Englisch)
Hey...ich habe für den Englischunterricht eine Zusammenfassung geschrieben und bin mir nicht ganz sicher, ob das, was ich geschrieben habe alles so stimmt...Könnte vl. jemand der was davon versteht mal drüberlesen? thx
The story is about the girl Nina and it’s her birthday. Her brother David and some friends planed a trip to the Kakadu National Park as a birthday surprise. The group had an argument about what to do. Nina and Mike want to go swimming in a freshwater billabong, but David disagreed. He worried about salt water crocodiles which could be there. They arrived at the park and the rest of the day went by normal. At the next day the group did some rock climbing, but while they did this, Mike and Nina disappeared. David and Cathy were worried and David hurt his foot. After much waiting time they come back to the other both. When Nina was alone with David, she told him that she and Mike were at a lower pool, but than a crocodile appeared at the other side. They ran and climbed a rock, so nothing fatal happened. But it was a big shock.
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Hallo,
hier was mir beim flüchtigen Durchlesen aufgefallen ist:
The story is about a girl called Nina and it is her birthday. Her brother David and some friends planned a trip to the Kakadu National Park as a birthday surprise. The group has an argument about what to do. Nina and Mike want to go swimming in a freshwater billabong, but David disagrees. He worries about salt water crocodiles which could be there. They arrive at the park and the rest of the day goes well. On the next day, the group does some rock climbing, but while doing so, Mike and Nina disappear. David and Cathy worry and David hurts his foot. After a wait, they come back to the other two. When Nina is alone with David, she tells him that she and Mike were at a lower pool, but then a crocodile appeared at the other side of the pool. They ran and climbed a rock and nothing serious happened. But it was a big shock.
- keine Kurzformen (it's) im geschriebenen Text
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Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.
:-) AstridDerPu
Schön, dass dir meine Antwort gefallen hat. Hoffentlich hat's geholfen !
Danke für das Sternchen!
:-) AstridDerPu
Nur so überflogen....
"planned" anstatt "planed"
"went" anstatt "went to go"
"went normal" anstatt "went by normal"
"they came back" anstatt "come"
so besser?
The story is about the girl Nina and it’s her birthday. Her brother David and some friends planned a trip to the Kakadu National Park as a birthday surprise. The group has an argument about what to do. Nina and Mike want to go swimming in a freshwater billabong, but David disagrees. He worries about salt water crocodiles which could be there. They arrive at the park and the rest of the day went normal. At the next day the group does some rock climbing, but while they do this, Mike and Nina disappeare. David and Cathy worry and David hurt his foot. After much waiting time they come back to the other both. When Nina is alone with David, she tells him that she and Mike were at a lower pool, but than a crocodile appeared at the other side. They ran and climbed a rock, so nothing fatal happened. But it was a big shock.
beim 2. Satz bin ich mir nicht sicher, weil in der Geschi haben sie es vorher geplant, also ganz ganz vorher wenn ihr wisst was ich meine... ):
Hatten das auch gerade in Englisch. Ein 'summary' wird immer in der Gegenwart geschrieben, nie in der Vergangenheit! Korriegiere nocheinmal die Zeiten, dann ist es gut! (:
Gruß, S.