Morgen mündliche Englisch Realschulprüfung, Text Korrektur
Hallo, ich habe morgen meine mündliche Realschulprüfung. Wir haben heute die Aufgabe für die Kurzpresentation(2-3min.) bekommen und wollte eure Meinung wissen. Es geht um ,,My Dream Job,, Hier ist der Text: My dream job Now I will tell you something about my dream job. My dream is to be a police officer because the uniform gives me strength. When I was a child I always wanted to arrest criminals to secure the city. I had three weeks internship at the police station and it was very interesting. So I can imagine to work as a cop. There are many departments in this job. Once the police protection, second the criminal police and finally the district police. The police protection has many interesting activities. They are called to inserts, to traffic accidents but anyway it is very dangerous because they arrest criminals. The criminal police is also an interesting department. They consult witnesses, they consult victims of crime, write reports and they are civil. That’s very important so they are not recognized by the criminals. The district police is something for older cops because they don’t have much action. They attend schools and speak with the pupils. That is not a thing for me. I want to work more at the police protection because it is very interesting. In this job you can earn about 2000 € a month. But it also can increase. That was my presentation about my dream job.
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Hallo Aramo!:)
Ich bin zwar kein Englischprofi aber ich habe mal versucht die Fehler die mir aufgefallen sind zu verbessern.
Hier meine Korrektion des Textes:
My dream job
In the following I will tell you something about my dream job. My dream is to be a police officer because the uniform gives me strength. When I was a child I always wanted to arrest criminals to secure the city. In addition, I had three weeks internship at the police station and it was very interesting. So I can imagine to work as a cop. I like that there are many departments in this job. On point is the police protection, the second one is the criminal police and finally the district police. The police protection has many interesting activities. They are called to inserts, furthermore to traffic accidents but anyway it is very dangerous because at times they must arrest very criminal persons. The criminal police is also an interesting department. They consult witnesses and victims of crime, write reports and they are civil. That’s very important, so they are not recognized by the criminals. The district police is something for older cops because there they don’t have to do much action. The main points of their duties are attending schools and speaking with the pupils. But that unfortunately doesn't sounds interesting to me. I rather want to work at the police protection because it is very diversified. In this job you can earn about 2000 € a month. But that also can increase. So that was my presentation about my dream job, thank you very much for listening.
Ich hofe Ich habe da jetzt keine weiteren Fehler eingebaut und wünsche dir viel Erfolg morgen! Nur nicht aufgeregt sein. :p
VlG, Ina.
cop muss weg, ist informell
once != ersens
sag firstly, secondly,...
und nicht finally da sind schon noch mehr bereiche
paar synonyme für interesting, because und criminals raussuchen
that`s würde ich lassen, ist informell
schreib lieber that is
thing ist auch informell
bzw. der satz That is not a thing for me
gefällt mir gar nicht
ich fnde ihn gut
Danke, kannst du mir denn eine Alternative für das letzte nennen?