Summary A pair of jeans -> Bitte verbessern:)

Hallo!

Ich schreibe bald eine Englisch-Klausur über A pair of jeans und The black Madonna. Ich habe hier eine kurze Summary zu A pair of jeans gemacht und würde euch bitten, diese inhaltlich(wenn die Kurzgeschichte bekannt ist) , grammatikalisch und von der Rechtschreibung her zu verbessern. (Ich habe auch noch ein Forum mit der anderen Kurzgeschichte geöffnet.

Miriam, a young pakestany women tried to have British and Muslim culture without giving up her identity. Her parents-in-law were shocked when they see her in western clothes. While Miriam turns to the traditional clothes her in-laws go earlier home than intended. They cancelled the arranged marriage. In the FIRST ending Miriam think that the modern clothes are the reason of her problem. In the SECOND ending Miriam decide to wear the western clothes and call Farook to discuss the situation.

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Schwarzbeere

17.05.2011, 16:38

Auch, wenn nicht mehr aktuell, hier die sprachliche und inhaltliche Verbesserung:

Miriam, who is a young Pakistani woman living in England, desperately tries to adapt to the British and the Muslim culture without giving up her identity. When Miriam accidentally meets her parents-in-law while wearing (inappropriate) Western clothes, she is discriminated against by her in-laws. Farook's parents (the in-laws), who manifest a narrow-minded attitude towards women and the Western culture and stick to islamic tradition/values, thus call the wedding off.

Sprachlich ist deine Inhaltsangabe ok, achte nur auf die Zeiten - generell gilt bei Inhaltsangaben, dass im Präsens zu schreiben ist.

Inhaltlich ist die Inhaltsangabe meines Erachtens etwas Zusammenhangslos und für Leute, die die Kurzgeschichte selbst nicht gelesen haben, nur schwer verständlich.

Amelierode

09.01.2022, 15:40

Habe alle Antworten mal zu einer Inhaltsangabe zusammengefasst:

The story is about Miriam, a young Pakistani woman, who has an arranged marriage with Farook. When Miriam comes home to her mother Fatima one day, she accidentally meets her in-laws, Ayub and Begum, while wearing inappropriate Western clothes. Farook's parents, who have a narrow-minded attitude towards women and Western culture and stick to Islamic traditions/values are completely shocked by Miriams outfit and call the wedding off. Miriam is furious and retires to her room. (second ending) Miriam dresses in the same clothes that scandalized her future in-laws and defiantly sets out to inform her fiancé about his parents`decision.

Tipps und Kritik sind immer willkommen

hoffe es gefällt euch.

lily6856

28.10.2021, 19:36

Hey,
Das hat vielleicht nichts mit dein Thema zu tun, aber ich möchte trotzdem dir sagen, dass Islam keine Kultur ist, sondern eine Religion und deswegen sagt man nicht she wants to be part of the Muslim culture.

JuleLovesNYC

04.04.2011, 23:08

Hallo Wackele :),

Ich kenne a pair of jeans nicht aber du drückst dich in deiner summary sehr gut aus.

Ich glaube du hast zwei mal das s bei der 3. Person Sg vergessen (Miriam thinks, Miriam decides)

Viel Glück bei deiner Klausur !

LG Jule

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