English Summary and short story: "The Fun They Had"
Any mistakes? Any Verbesserungsvorschläge? P.s. Ist der Text nicht zu lang für eine Summary? Der orginal Text hat ca. 1042 Wörter.
The short story ‘The fun they had‘, written by Isaac Asimov deals with a boy and a girl, Tommy and Margie, who find out something about school in the past. On the 17th of March 2155 Tommy, a thirteen-year-old boy, finds a ‘real book‘ which has been printed on paper. He is at the house of Margie, an eleven-year-old girl. They both take a look at it togehter. The book is really old and the pages are yellow and crinky. In the year 2155 this kind of books do not exist anymore. In this time words are moving on a television screen. These televisions can contain over a million of boks. That is the reason, why Tommy thinks that they are much better. He has found the old book in the attic of his house. While reading, Tommy says that it is about school. Margie hates school and cannot understand why someone would write about it. She was having problems with learning geography from her ‘mechanical teacher‘. It was black, large and had a screen on it. It teaches the students, gives them exercises and askes them questions, all in a special room in their own house. It can also calculate the marks in no time. Margie hates the slot where she has to insert her homework or test papers. Once the geopraphy sector of her mechanical teacher was geraded too quick, so that her marks got worse and worse. The County Inspector rebuilt it after one hour. He was really nice to Margie. She hopped that her mechanical teacher would be taken away for a longer time, like Tommy’s was, because it’s history sector blanked out completly. Tommy says that the book which he has found, is not about their type of school, it is about school centuires ago. They find out that students back then had a man as a teacher who taught the girls and boys, gave them homework and asked them questions. They had a special building, all the children went to. And they learned the same things, if they were the same age. First Margie does not understand how a person could be a teacher and how the students were thaught the same thing, because her mother says that the education must fit to each child's mind, but nevertheless in her opinion these schools are funny and she wants to read more about it. Then it is time for Margie and Tommy for their school. Margie goes into the schoolroom in her house where the mechanical teacher stands. It is already on, because the lessons are always at regular hours. She was thinking about the old school system and how much fun the children must had, learning and spending time togehter.
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The short story ‘The fun they had‘, written by Isaac Asimov deals with a boy and a girl, Tommy and Margie, who find out something about school in the past. On (the; wird nur gesprochen, nicht geschrieben.) 17th (of ; wird nur gesprochen, nicht geschrieben.) March 2155 Komma Tommy, a thirteen-year-old boy, finds a ‘real book‘ which has been printed on paper. He is at the house of Margie (s-Genitiv verwenden), an eleven-year-old girl. They both take a look at it (= Margies Haus, nicht das Buch) togehter.
The book is really old and the pages are yellow and crinky. In (---) year 2155 Komma this kind of books do not exist anymore. In this time words are moving (Zeit) on a television screen. These televisions can contain over a million of boks. That is the reason kein Komma why Tommy thinks that they are much better.
He has found the old book in the attic of his house. While reading, Tommy says that it is about school. Margie hates school and cannot understand why someone would write about it. She was having (Zeit) problems with learning geography from her ‘mechanical teacher‘. It was black, large and had a screen on it. It teaches the students, gives them exercises and askes them questions, all in a special room in their own house. It can also calculate the marks in no time. Margie hates the slot where she has to insert her homework or test papers. Once the geopraphy sector of her mechanical teacher was geraded (Wort und Zeit) too quick, so that her marks got worse and worse. The County Inspector rebuilt it after one hour. He was really nice to Margie. She hopped that her mechanical teacher would be taken away for a longer time, like Tommy’s was kein Komma because it’s history sector blanked out completly.
Tommy says (that) the book (which) he has found (Zeit), is not about their type of school, it is (ersetze durch but) about school centuires ago. They find out that students back then had a man as a teacher who taught the girls and boys (ersetze durch Objektpronomen), gave them homework and asked them questions. They had a special building kein Komma all (the) children went to. And (kein Satzanfang) they learned (= US, BE = learnt) the same things kein Komma
if they were the same age. First Komma Margie does not understand how a person could be a teacher and how the students were thaught the same thing kein Komma because her mother says that (---) education must fit (---) each child's mind, but nevertheless in her opinion Komma these schools are funny and she wants to read more about it. Then it is time for Margie and Tommy for their school. Margie goes into the schoolroom in her house Komma where the mechanical teacher stands. It is already on kein Komma because the lessons are always at regular hours. She was thinking about the old school system and how much fun the children must had, learning and spending time togehter.
Das ist zu lang, man sagt, ein Summary sollte über den Daumen gepeilt 1/5 des Originaltextes lang sein.
Bitte überprüfe auch nochmal die Zeitformen, ich habe den Eindruck, da geht es kunterbunt durcheinander.
Vor because und allen anderen Adverbialbestimmungen (z.B. Zeit, Ort, Bedingung usw.) steht kein Komma, wenn dieser Teilsatz hinten steht. Steht er am Beginn, wird mit einem Beistrich (= Komma) abgetrennt.
Das Fettgedruckte muss korrigiert werden. Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.
Für das Vokabular und die Rechtschreibung empfehle ich ein gutes (online) Wörterbuch, z.B. pons.eu,
für die Grammatik ego4u.de und englisch-hilfen.de.
AstridDerPu
Schön, dass dir meine Antwort gefallen hat und danke für das Sternchen!
:-) AstridDerPu
Siehe Beitrag von Astrid.
Achte darauf, dass Du nicht ständig zwischen den Zeiten hin und herspringst. Grundtempus: simple present (obwohl gerade in DIESER Story auch häufig simple past verwendet werden muss).
Einige Korrekturen (nur Auswahl):
together ... the reason why (OHNE Komma) ... She(Margie) is having problems (ODER besser: has problems).... It** is ** black and large... (relativ unwichtiges Detail). ... were taught...
... She thinks about the old... the fun the children must have had ....