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The extract from the novel " Looking für Alaska", written by John Green, deals with a day where Miles get kicked out of the class and Alaska tries to protect him.

It is a Wednesday morning. Miles sits in the class. Je looks out of the window and thinks about the tree and the forest. Dr Hyde notices that. He tells Miles to leave the class for not paying attetion. Alaska stands up and tries to protect Miles. Dr. Hyde is strict and tell them both that they have to pay attention in his class or they failed. After this he kicks both out of the class. Alaska and Miles leave the class room.

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Answer 1

[ReimundAcker]

Es gibt ein paar Rechtschreibfehler. Korrektur:

• Im 1. Satz: "gets kicked off" statt "get kicked off"
• Im 4. Satz: "He looks" statt "Je looks"
• Im 6. Satz: "attention" statt "attetion"
• Im 8. Satz: "tells" statt "tell"
• Im 8. Satz: "After this, " statt "After this " (mit Komma)
• Im 10. Satz: "classroom" statt "class room" (ein Wort)

Weitere Verbesserungsvorschläge:

• Im 1. Satz: "from John Green's novel 'Looking für Alaska'" statt "from the novel 'Looking für Alaska', written by John Green"
• Im 1. Satz: "deals with the day when Miles Halter gets kicked out of class and Alaska Young comes to his defense" statt "deals with a day where Miles get kicked out of the class and Alaska tries to protect him"
• 3. Satz: "Miles is sitting in Dr. Hyde's religion class" statt "Miles sits in the class"
• 4. Satz: "He's staring out of the window, thinking about trees and the forest" statt "Je looks out of the window and thinks about the tree and the forest"
• 5. Satz: "Dr. Hyde notices this" statt "Dr Hyde notices that" ("Dr." einheitlich mit oder ohne Punkt)
• Im 6. Satz: "He tells Miles to leave the classroom" statt "He tells Miles to leave the class"
• Im 7. Satz: "they have to pay attention in his class or fail" statt "they have to pay attention in his class or they failed"

Ich würde noch einen Satz darüber spendieren, was Miles über den Vorfall denkt und fühlt. Er respektiert Dr. Hyde, aber sein Rauswurf kränkt ihn. Er war bisher immer der Liebling der Lehrer.