Englisch?
Hallo. Könnte mal eventuell jemand über meinen Text über die USA drüber schauen? Wäre echt lieb von euch, danke! Und wenn ihr noch irgendwelche Sachen zum Text ergänzen würdet (Themen, wie z.B. die Bevölkerung usw), dann gerne her damit!
,,The US are in North America. America is a Continental and it consists of South America, Central America and North America. The US are very popular since they created a lot of things like McDonald’s and so on. It is very cool there because of the many sights such as the Statue of Liberty which you can see in many pictures. You can see a lot of cool things of the US have become so popular. Today the population of the US are about 330 million. The capital is Washington, D.C and people come there from all over the world. People from Mexico, Central or South America are called Hispanics or Lations. Their first language is often Spanish, so the US don‘t have a national language since more than one third of the population speaks Spanish in some areas and that is why most of the signs are in Spanish and English. There are about 2,5 million Native Americans and most of them live on reservations. When white immigrants came to America in the 17th century, they fought against the Native Americans because they wanted to get their land and after they had won, most of Native Americans had to leave their land and they had to live on reservations. Today, they still live on reservations and they are very poor. They don‘t have any jobs, so they try to earn money by keeping traditions such as the powwow. It is a celebration of American Indian culture. They sing, feast and dance there. Native Americans such as the Cherokees are one of the most popular Indian tribes of the US and they live in the South of the US. Another popular tribe are the Navajos who live in the Southwestern of the US. In 1883 there were 4 million black Americans and they didn‘t have the same rights as white Americans, so people like Malcolm X fought for the rights of black people. Today about 40 million black Americans live in the US. As you can see, the US had a lot of problems in the past but it is still a very cool nation.“
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ich wäre euch echt dankbar!
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America is a Continental
America is a continent (statt Continental).
"The US" wird in den ersten 3 Sätzen als Satzanfang genutzt, evtl lässt sich da beim zweiten und dritten Satz ja ein anderer finden.
The US are very popular since they created a lot of things like McDonald’s and so on
Ich würde bei der Aufzählung über Dinge, die die US erfunden hat, evtl noch mehr Dinge aufzählen, anstatt die USA auf McDonalds zu "reduzieren".
It is very cool there because of the many sights such as the Statue of Liberty which you can see in many pictures
Versuche, "very" vor den Adjektiven zu vermeiden. Statt "very cool" könntest du bspw. "amazing"/"interesting"/"fascinating"/"mesmerizing". Es hilft auch, Wörter wie "quite" zu nutzen (The US are quite popular since they created a lot of things like McDonald's,...)
Today the population of the US are about 330 million
Die Population ist Einzahl, also is statt are, man kann daraus dann etwas machen wie "Today, the population of the US is as high as 330 million"
Hispanics or Lations
Latinos, ist schätze ich ein Typo :)
Their first language is often Spanish, so the US don‘t have a national language since more than one third of the population speaks Spanish in some areas and that is why most of the signs are in Spanish and English
Dass die USA keine Amtssprache hat, liegt nicht daran, dass Hispanics Spanisch sprechen, daher ist "so" vielleicht nicht die beste Wahl. Satzbau ist auch nicht der reinste, ich würde es so formulieren: "Their first language is often Spanish. The US don't have a national language, since in some areas, more than a third of the population speaks Spanish as a first language, thus most signs are in both Spanish and English."
There are about 2,5 million Native Americans and most of them live on reservations
live in reservations, sie leben in den Gebieten, nicht auf ihnen
Today, they still live on reservations and they are very poor
Wieder, in reservations, und very vermeiden (z.b. "Today, they still live within those reservations and suffer from poverty")
They sing, feast and dance there
There wird im Englischen eher als Beschreibung eines Ortes genutzt. "Powwows include singing and feasting, as well as dancing."
Native Americans such as the Cherokees are one of the most popular Indian tribes of the US and they live in the South of the US. Another popular tribe are the Navajos who live in the Southwestern of the US
Cherokee wird normalerweise im Plural auch Cherokee genannt. Schöner als "in the South of the US" klingt "in the southern US". Im "Southwestern" kann man nicht leben, da southwestern ein Adjektiv ist. Das Nomen wäre "Southwest" (...who live in the Southwest of the US/in the southwestern US).
As you can see, the US had a lot of problems in the past but it is still a very cool nation.
Cool ist ein sehr informelles Wort. "As you can see, the US had (and still has) quite a lot of problems, yet it is a unique, manifold nation."
Hoffe ich konnte behilflich sein ^^
Danke! :)