Englisch ( Text Hilfe )
Hallo ihr lieben :) ich wollte mal fragen wie ihr den Text findet. Und was ich eventuell verbessern kann. Ich bin in der 9. klasse.
A young mayor? I want to talk about the cons and the pros of a young mayor. An advantage is, that he is an energetic person who knows the interests of young People. Another point is that maybe more young persons would get interest in politics, because of the young mayor. But on the other side he would not have so much experience.
Much free time is really important for a young person. But a young mayor would not have time for studies and for free time activities. Thereby he might lose friend. It would be very difficult, because he has to do more than one job, because a mayor is not paid very well.
Another problem is, that he would be too young to understand older people. And maybe the older people in the city do not accept him as 'boss'.
To my mind a young mayor is a bad idea, because he can not represent the 'whole' city. The responsibility is too high for a young person. And he would not has enought experience to deal with money.
Würde mich über ein Feedback freuen :) Danke im voraus.
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But on the other side he wouldn't have THAT much experience. "So" ist auch richtig, klingt aber weniger eingedeutscht mit "that". Thereby he might lose friendS Typo nehme ich an. And maybe the older people in the city WON'T accept him... Ich bin mir bei dem nicht ganz sicher, aber es klingt richtiger. And he wouldn't HAVE ENOUGH* experience to deal with money. Weil du would hast, musst du "have" nicht mehr anpassen. <;
Keine Gewähr auf Richtigkeit!
*Ich würde den 4.satz so schreiben: ...that more young persons would be interested in politics. Da brauchst du nicht noch zu begründen wegen dem jungen Bürgermeister das hast du ja schon gesagt mit ein anderer Punkt ist...
*Spare time is really important for a young person. (free time klingt zu deutsch und much passt nicht so rein)
*..he might lose friends
*A mayor has to do more than one job,because the job isn't paid well (and that is really difficult) was ist 'it' ? Also das: IT would be very...
*At my opinion a young mayor isn't a good idea,...
*enough
Also vom inhalt her ist es ganz gut außer das mit; er würde freunde verlieren; du musst deine Argumente noch etwas besser begründen. Aber ich find den Einstieg gut :) ich hoffe ich konnte dir helfen
ich finde, dass du den text sehr gut geschrieben hast und viele ideen reinbringst.