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The short story 'Going home', written by Pete Hamill, an American journalist deals with Vingo,a former prisoner, going home and telling his story. On a bus, six young people, three boys and three girs from New York are going to Florida on holiday. Also a man, a former prisoner called Vingo sits in the same bus on his way home to Brunswick. The young people are thinking about their holiday when they notice that the man never moves and does not say anything at all. The bus stops at a restaurant and everybody gets off exept Vingo. The young people start to wonder about his behavior. When they come back, one of them, a girl, sits beside him, introduces herself and starts a small conversation. She offers him some wine, which Vingo gratefully accepts. After a while the girl goes back to the other, when the man is nearly about to fall asleep. The next morning he goes into the restaurant to the young people. He orders coffee and smokes nervously. When the girl sits with him again in the bus he starts to tell her his story. Vingo has been in prison for the last three and a half years and had been now released. He is going home, to his town called Brunswick. The girl asks him if he is marred, to which he replies that he does not know that. He wrote to his wife that it is okay for him if she does not want to stay with him togehter anymore or if she found a new man, but she never answered. He wrote to her that, if she does not think this way, she should put a yellow handkerchief on the big oak tree in their town, so that he knows that she still wants him back. He also showes the girl and the others pictures of his wife and his three children. When the bus reaches Brunswick all the young people, who got to know his story too, are shouting and screaming, because the oak tree is covered with a lot of yellow handkerchiefs. Vingo is not shouting. He gets up from his seat slowly and stars his way home.

Answer 1

[AstridDerPu]

The short story 'Going home', written by Pete Hamill, an American journalist Komma deals with Vingo,a former prisoner, going home and telling his story. On a bus (ans Satzende), six young people, three boys and three girs from New York are going to Florida on holiday. Also (kein Satzanfang; Position) a man, a former prisoner called Vingo Komma sits in the same bus on his way home to Brunswick. The young people are thinking about their holiday when they notice that the man never moves and does not say anything at all. The bus stops at a restaurant and everybody gets off exept Vingo. The young people start to wonder about his behavior (= AE; BE = behaviour). When they come back, one of them, a girl, sits beside him, introduces herself and starts a small conversation. She offers him some wine, which Vingo gratefully accepts. After a while Komma (erzählerische Element gehören nicht in eine Summary) the girl goes back to the other, when the man is nearly about to fall asleep. The next morning Komma he goes into the restaurant to the young people. He orders coffee and smokes nervously. When the girl sits with him again in the bus Komma he starts to tell her his story. Vingo has been in prison for the last three and a half years and had been now (Position) released. He is going homekein Komma to his town called Brunswick. The girl asks him if he is marred, to which he replies that he does not know (---). He wrote to his wife that it is (Zeit) okay for him if she does (Zeit) not want to stay with him togehter (Word Order) anymore or if she found a new man, but she never answered (Zeit). He wrote to her that, if she does (Zeit) not think this way (Ausdruck), she should put a yellow handkerchief on the big oak tree in their town, so that he knows that she still wants him back. He also showes the girl and the others pictures of his wife and his three children. When the bus reaches Brunswick Komma all the young people, who got to know his story too, are shouting and screaming kein Komma because the oak tree is covered with a lot of yellow handkerchiefs. Vingo is not shouting. He gets up from his seat slowly (Position) and stars (RS; außerdem fehlt hier eine Präposition his way home.

Das Fettgedruckte muss korrigiert werden. Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.

Für das Vokabular und die Rechtschreibung empfehle ich ein gutes (online) Wörterbuch, z.B. pons.eu,

für die Grammatik ego4u.de und englisch-hilfen.de.

Du solltest wirklich versuchen, die Ratschläge, die du hier bekommst auch umzusetzen. Wie ich schon in meiner letzten Antwort geschrieben habe,

steht vor because und allen anderen Adverbialbestimmungen (z.B. Zeit, Ort, Bedingung usw.) kein Komma, wenn dieser Teilsatz hinten steht. Steht er am Beginn, wird mit einem Beistrich (= Komma) abgetrennt.

Für eine Summary (ca. 1/5 des Originals) dürfte auch dieser Text viel zu lang und ausführlich sein. Es handelt sich eher um eine Nacherzählung.

Junge Leute und Ex-Häftling kommen auf einer Busfahrt ins Gespräch. Der Ex-Häftling erzählt, dass er seiner Frau geschrieben hat, sie solle ein gelbes Tuch an einen Baum hängen, wenn sie ihren Mann zurückhaben möchte. Als sie in Brunswick ankommen, hängt der Baum voller gelber Tücher.

Auch bei den Zeiten geht es wieder kunterbunt durcheinander, aufgepasst auch bei den Zeiten in der indirekten Rede.

Deine Sätze sind zum Teil auch zu lang und zu verschachtelt; weniger ist manchmal mehr.

:-) AstridDerPu

PS: Als kurzer Nachgedanke; ich glaub nicht, dass es sinnvoll und zielführend ist, wenn du bis tief in die Nacht englische Summaries schreibst. Geh besser früher schlafen und am nächsten Tag ausgeruht erneut ans Werk.

Answer 2

[Callie123]

The short story 'Going home', written by Pete Hamill, an American journalist(Entweder brauchst du ein Komma nach Journalist oder du kannst sagen, "American journalist Pete Hamill") deals with Vingo,a former prisoner, going home and telling his story. On a bus, six young people, three boys and three girls from New York are going to Florida on holiday (Note: "Vacation" wird in den USA gesagt). Also a man ("also a man"? Er ist auch ein Mann?), a former prisoner called Vingo sits in the same bus on his way home to Brunswick. The young people are thinking about their holiday when they notice that the man (welcher Mann?) never moves and does not say anything at all. The bus stops at a restaurant and everybody gets off except Vingo. The young people start to wonder about his behavior. When they come back, one of them, a girl, sits beside him, introduces herself and starts a small conversation. She offers him some wine, which Vingo gratefully accepts. After a while the girl goes back to the other, when the man is nearly about to fall asleep. The next morning he goes into the restaurant to the young people. He orders coffee and smokes nervously. When the girl sits with him again in the bus*Komma he starts to tell her his story. Vingo has been in prison for the last three and a half years and had been now released (had just been released). He is going home**, (kein Komma)** to his town called Brunswick (Gehört das Town zu ihm?). The girl asks him if he is marred, to which he replies that he does not know that ('that' hier ist nicht erförderlich). He wrote to his wife that it is okay for him if she does not want to stay with him togehter anymore or if she found a new man, but she never answered. He wrote to her that, if she does not think this way, she should put a yellow handkerchief on the big oak tree in their town, so that he knows that she still wants him back. He also showes the girl and the others pictures of his wife and his three children. When the bus reaches Brunswick all the young people, who got to know his story too, are shouting and screaming, because the oak tree is covered with a lot of yellow handkerchiefs. Vingo is not shouting. He gets up from his seat slowly and stars his way home.

Hoffentlich hilft das ein bisschen!

LG Callie