Welche anfrage für ein Schüleraustausch ist besser?

Hi! Ich habe hier eine bewerbung, die ich so abschicken würde.

Ich habe sie verbessern lassen von ChatGPT (bin da eig nich so der fan von aber gerade habe ich keine andere Möglichkeit), und wollte euch fragen welche von beiden besser ist, oder keine von beiden?

das ist meine:
Dear blablabla,

I am a student from a German school in Munich.

I am looking for an exchange in Canada and came across your school while searching, and I am very interested, to get to know your school more!

At first, I would like to ask if your school would be ready to make an exchange happen. If the answer is yes, please let me know and I would be pleased if you would give me more information about how I could apply and how much it would cost.

Warmly,

Jonathan.

Das ist die Verbesserung von ChatGPT:

Dear blablabka,

I am a student from a German school in Munich and I am looking for an exchange program in Canada. While searching for schools, I came across your institution and I am very interested in learning more about it.

Firstly, I would like to inquire if your school is open to exv´change programs. If the answer is yes, please let me know and I would appreciate it if you could provide me with more information on how I can apply and the associated costs.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

Sincerely,

Jonathan.

ich freue mich über antworten mit Begründung! danke im voraus!

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Repwf

08.05.2023, 20:03

Erste Version ist besser, weil...

…was nutzt dir eine perfekt englische Formulierung wenn du es doch nicht kannst?

Das erste bist einfach DU und das solltest du auch bleiben!

Johnny631

Beitragsersteller

08.05.2023, 20:04

Dankeschön für deine hilfreiche antwort! ^^

Milio050110270

08.05.2023, 20:04

Erste Version ist besser, weil...

Erste Version klingt besser. Sag ChatGpT doch mal genauer, was es wie ändern soll, dann macht es die Arbeit wahrscheinlich besser

Johnny631

Beitragsersteller

08.05.2023, 20:05

Dankeschön für diesen Rat! schönen Abend dir noch^^

Milio050110270

08.05.2023, 20:28

@Johnny631

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