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Hi, my name is Felix, iam 15 years old and i live with my family in a small town, called x in germany.
Its really nice here,It's quiet and it's nice to live here with your family, but sometimes im sad too, i would like to live in a big city like berlin where you can go shopping or where are thousands of restaurants.
Overall its nice here.
But lets get back to me and my family, in my family there is my little sister x , and my mom and dad.
In my free time i like it to go outside with my friends or to drive to the nearest town, x.
If im not outside with my friends i often go to the gym, like 4 times per week and to be honest, im really proud of myself that I'm going through with it and I hope I will continue to do it.
After my 10th class i will start my apprenticeship as a chemical and i’m really thankful for that, because i will earn enough money and i won’t be longer dependent on my parents. I will save the half of the money and spend the rest on clothes and other things.
I would like to invest half of the money that i’m going to safe and use it to build up a business so that I can be self-employed when I am about 20 years old.
One of my big goals is to be self-employed so that i can organize my working hours be myself and have more time for myself and my family
About a year ago i founded a fashion brand with a friend and we really wanted to do it, we even went to the town hall and registered a business
But unfortunately it didn't worked because we didn't have enough money for that, after my training we want to try it again
Iam really good about social media and have a great experience in this field, and i’m always learning english with it
Thank you for taking the time to get to know me a little better.
Definitiv ja. Hätte sie es moniert oder hinterfragt, hätte sie "Why oh why?!" nutzen müssen. Allerdings weiß man nicht,ob sie native speaker ist oder ein intellektuelles Problem hat,Slang nutzt,etc.