Englisch Textüberarbeitung?

Liat (l. 1) is the birthname of Nevo. He always had a son rather than a daughter relationship to his father (l. 89). He outs in two steps. Firstly Nevo thought that he is a lesbian (l. 83) but soon he changes his pronouns from she/her to they/ them or he/him (l. 30). Nevo had a nice childhood and refers his childhood to the name „Liat“. He likes this name but still it doesn’t feel right for him. When others use his birthname it sometimes feels like an insult because he doesn’t feel accepted (l. 38ff.). He begins searching for a new name (l. 47). His mother is having a hard time understanding and accepting it (l. 60f.). It is important for him that his new name will be a hebrew name just like the name „Liat“ is (l. 71-73). His friend helps him on deciding a name (l. 71-73). He asks a leader in a hebrew camp which one her favorit boy name is. She answered with „Nevo“ (l. 75). He wears the name outside the house (l. 74f.), but his mother finds out (l. 77). She accepts it and chooses her middle name „Amiel“ (l. 78f.). He outs to his father and he was quite alright with it (l. 98f.). 

Hallo. Meine englisch Lehrerin meinte zu mir das dort sehr viele Fehler drin sind. Ich kann jedoch nicht mehr Fehler finden. Könnte mir bitte jemand helfen? Es kommt nicht auf den Inhalt sondern auf die Rechtschreibung an. Danke im voraus. :)

Answer 1

[AstridDerPu]

Hallo,

deine Lehrerin hat recht.

Überarbeite wie folgt:

• Zeiten (tenses)
• Rechtschreibung z. B. favorit, Klein- und Großschreibung, Zusammen- und Getrenntschreibung, Bindestriche
• Zeichensetzung
• das Verb "tragen"
• Verben und die dazugehörigen Präpositionen
• Präpositionen
• Genitive

AstridDerPu

Answer 2

[lysuzzz]

probier hier mit: https://www.onlinecorrection.com/ und ja dein text hat fehler zumindestens bei american english