My best frienddd
Habe bald Englisch Schularbeit und wollte fragen ob sich jemand meinen Text auf grammatikalische oder sprachliche Fehler ansehen könnte.
My best friend is Charlie. Charlie is 16 years old and lives in Wieselburg. I know him since my childhood and he has been always there for me. In the following text I want to describe his appearance and his qualities, which make him to the person he is.
Charlie is 1,8m high and is looking really sporty because he likes a lot of sports, which help him to hold his body in a good and healthy condition. He has brown, short hair and most of the time he is smiling because he is simply a happy person.
One of his starches is his generosity. He loves it to help other people if they are not understanding something at school or have any other problems. Moreover, he is a funny person and has always a good entertaining joke in stock. Although Charlie is such a funny person, he is also able to handle with responsibility. This feature makes him a good student. Last year he even has only ones in his school certificate.
Most of the time, if he does not have to do anything for school, he is playing outside with friends or helping in the household, which is not seen often seen nowadays. His greatest hobby is soccer. Charlie is spending nearly a hour per day on playing soccer because he wants to be a well-known football player if he is older. Not everyone can deserves his money by soccer because you have to be really good at playing football. I think his abition and enthusiasm will make him a good soccer player and that he has a real chance to become a famous football player.
All in all Charlie is a really funny and reliable person and I can be happy to have such a good friend like him.
Danke im Voraus:)
4 Antworten
Hey :) Also so weit ich weiß heißt es doch : He has always been there for me ;) ich würde auch nicht he is ... m high, sondern "he is 1,8 m tall" und "he looks really sporty" -> denn er sieht ja immer so aus und nicht nur in diesem Moment ;) Schreib " he is a simply happy person (: UND VERGISS DAS " makeS " und "HELPs" - > Vorn ***** ...es stimmt so :) anstatt "I can be happy to have ..." schreib " I am very grateful having such a good friend... mit dem Satzbau kann man immer punkten ;D "he loves helping other people" klingt , denke ich, auch besser. "...and always has a good joke in stock" Nach most of the time würde ich "when" anstatt "if" nehmen, weil er es ja zu der Zeit macht, in der er nicht für die Schule lernt ;) ich empfehle auch "helping his mom/ mother( kommt drauf an , ob du AE oder BE schreibst) zu schreiben " can deserve" oder schreib noch besser " is able to raise his money by playing soccer" und schreib "everybody" .. ich denke, dass es in deinem Kontext besser passt..kannst es natürlich auch so lassen, eigentlich bleibt die bedutung ja gleich :D Ja, das mit den Noten würde ich befürworten, also das Kommentar ok, kein Problem und gerne wieder ;) LG PS: tut mir Leid, das die "Korrektur" nicht in der richtigen Reihenfolge ist :o
Du wohl eher nicht, zumal du myfunnyface in beiden Punkten falsch korrigiert hast:
- Das Wort greatful gibt gar es nicht, grateful ist richtig (gratitude = Dankbarkeit, grateful = dankbar).
- He is a simply happy person. ist ebenso richtig, da es übersetzt lautet: Er ist ein einfach glücklicher Mensch. (folglich ohne Komma).
Charlie is my best friend. He is 16 years old and lives in Wieselburg. I have known him since being a child and he has always been there for me. In the following text I would like to describe his appearance and his qualities which make him to that person he is.
Charlie is 1.8 m tall and looks really sporty because he does a lot of sports which helps him keeping his body in a good and healthy condition. He has brown, short hair and most of the time he keeps smiling, as he is just a cheery person.
One of his strengths is his generosity. He loves helping other people if they don't understand anything at school or have some other problems. Moreover, he is pretty hilarious and always has a good entertaining joke in stock. Although he is that funny, he is also able to act responsibly on the other hand. This feature makes him a good student. Last year, he only got A's in his school certificate.
Assuming that he doesn't have anything to do for school, most of the time he uses to play outside with his friends or keeps order regarding the household. The last mentioned doesn't take place very often nowadays. His favorite hobby is soccer. Charlie spends almost an hour per day on playing soccer because he wants to become a famous football player after getting older. Not everybody is able to earn one's money as a soccer, since you have to be really good at playing football. I think his ambition and enthusiasm will help him emerging a good soccer player which enables him getting the chance to become famous as well.
Sorry, das hätte ich fast übersehen:
All in all, Charlie really is a funny person who you can rely on and I am very happy to have such a good friend like him.
möchte mich besonders bei Kathy34 und myfunnyface bedanken:)
"Charlie is spending nearly a hour per day on playing soccer because he wants to be a well-known football player if he is older. Not everyone can deserves his money by soccer because you have to be really good at playing football." Ich würd hier an deiner Stelle entweder bei football oder soccer bleiben denn es ist ja eigentlich nicht das gleiche. Wahrscheinlich wolltest du nur Wortwiederholungen vermeiden aber das solltest du umschreiben. Sonst recht gelungener Text.
ganz oben: makes* 2. Text: helps* 3. Text: das mit dem last Year ... verändere es doch einfach mit 'very good grades'. und außerdem sind Soccer und Football 2 unterschiedliche Sportarten. und du hast 2x Seen geschrieben. sonst ist glaub ich alles okay :)
"grateful" >>> greatful
"he is a simply happy person" >> he is a simply, (<<Komma) happy person
...ansonsten,ganz gut - Du hast ein Auge für`s Detaill - das ist SEHR gut
:-)