englisch formaler email?

Hallo, ich muss in Englisch ein formaler Brief bzw E-Mail schreiben wobei ich die Vorteile von Austauschschüler benenne. Der Anfang meines Hauptteil lautet:

Firstly through the student exchange many students lear their personality better and develop it further.A student exchange often gives them the opportunity to start from scratch. They try new things and learn how to deal with conflicts and problems independently.

Kann jemand mir bitte es für mich korrigieren?

Danke

Answer 1

[AstridDerPu]

Firstly (Komma) through the student exchange many students lear (RS) their personality better (Das ergibt keinen Sinn.) and develop it further. (Leerzeichen) A student exchange often gives them the opportunity to start from scratch. They try new things and learn how to deal with conflicts and problems independently.

Das Fettgedruckte muss korrigiert werden. Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.

Nichts für ungut, aber bitte arbeite auch an deinem Deutsch.

AstridDerPu

Answer 2

[Pfiati]

Firstly weglassen.

*learn

Answer 3

[Aventus9999]

firstly, through student exchange, many students learn about their personality better and develop it further. A student exchange often gives them the opportunity to start from scratch, try new things, and learn how to deal with conflicts and problems independently.