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hier ist der Aufsatz:

Every pupil in class 9 had to do an internship in January. Because of this I will comment the statement "Internship in class 9-important?" in the following text.

Doing  an internship in class 9 has positive such as negative aspects.

Firstly the pupils get work experience. For example they learn how to apply for a job or to work in a company. These are very important qualifications you need in the world of work. Besides the pupils get a good overview about the different jobs and companies.

Secondly the teenagers become more independent. They had to do many things like going to the company or buying food in the break by their own.  These are qualifications you do not learn in school.

Thirdly the pupil can try out their "dream-job". Maybe after their internship they notice that this job is not a good future job.

On the other hand there are negative aspects, too.

In my view many pupil cannot do an interesting job in their internship. Some companies only choose older pupil. So they often do jobs like cleaning a room and do not learn anything, which is important.

Another negative aspects is that,  the pupils lose two school weeks. In this week's they could learn some usefully things, they need in the Abitur. Besides the in E1 there is a second internship.

All in all I think an internship is very important, but the pupil need only one in E1.

 

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