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habe demnächst ein kleines Referat mit einem Kollegen. Den Text den ihr hier sieht ist mein Part. Wäre ganz froh wenn ihr mal eure Meinung dazu schreibt, was man besser machen könnte oder ob ihr damit was anfangen könnt.

Good afternoon.

We want to give you a short presentation about the Royal Flying Doctor Service and road trains in Australia´s outback. Our presentation has 2 parts. After that there will be time for you questions.

Firstly, I would like to tell about the Royal Flying Doctor Service

The Royal Flying Doctor Service of Australia is one of the largest and most comprehensive aeromedical organisations in the world. It provides emergency and primary health care services for people living in remote areas of Australia. It is a non profit organization which provides health care to people who cannot access a hospital.

The Area Medical Service was found in 1928 by John Flynn. The first base was in Cloncurry, Queensland and in 1934, started the first plane from the base to his first emergency. In 1943, the name changed from Area Medical Service to Royal Flying Doctor Service.

The Royal Flying Doctor Service has actually 63 planes and 21 bases in Australia. Emergency calls will received by phone or two-way radio communication. The plane with his crew need maximum 2 hours to fly to a patient. The Royal Flying stationed also boxes with medicaments in some places in the outback, for people who are ill.

The cost of the RFDS are financed by federal grants from the government, the Norhtern Territory and from donations. The cost for the equipment and medical devices must pay the service itself.

The RFDS has an Area of 7 millions square kiolmetres, this is two-thirds of the total area of Australia. The base in Alice Springs is responsibility for 1 square kilometer in this almost 16. 000 people live. 90 percent of them are Aboriginie.

The base in Alice Springs is one of the famous station, because tourists can visit this station.

In summary is the Royal Flying Doctor Service a great organization to help people in the remote areas in the Outback of Australia

1 Antwort

Intelinside

20.11.2015, 23:19

Hey XpilotX,

hier ist der Text korrigiert:

Good afternoon and welcome to our short presentation about the Royal Flying Doctor Service and THE road trains in Australia´s outback. Our presentation has 2 parts. After that there will be SOME time for YOUR questions.

FIRST, I would like to tell YOU about the Royal Flying Doctor Service

The Area Medical Service was found in 1928 by John Flynn. The first base was in Cloncurry, Queensland and in 1934, THE FIRST PLANE STARTED from the base to his first emergency. In 1943, the name changed from Area Medical Service to Royal Flying Doctor Service.

The Royal Flying Doctor Service has actually 63 planes and 21 bases in Australia. Emergency calls ARE received by phone or two-way radio communication. The plane with ITS crew need maximum 2 hours to fly to a patient. The Royal Flying ALSO STATIONED boxes with medicaments in some places in the outback, for people who are ill.

The cost of the RFDS IS financed by federal grants from the government, the Northern Territory and from donations. The cost for the equipment and medical devices MUST BE PAID BY the service itself.

The RFDS has an Area of 7 millions square KILOMETRES, this is two-thirds of the total area of Australia. The base in Alice Springs is RESPONSIBLE for 1 square kilometer WHERE almost 16. 000 people live. 90 percent of them are Aboriginie.

The base in Alice Springs is one of the MOST famous station, because tourists can visit IT.

In summary the Royal Flying Doctor Service IS a great organization THAT HELPS people in the remote areas in the Outback of Australia.

Thank you for listening to my presentation! Any questions ?

Ein paar Fehlern aber sonst, sehr gut gemacht! :)

Viel Erfolg!

XpilotX

Beitragsersteller

21.11.2015, 07:53

WOW ! Und auch noch korrigiert !

Ich bedanke mich dafür das du dir die Zeit genommen hast den Text zu korrigieren, DANKE !

Grüße Max

Intelinside

21.11.2015, 10:49

@XpilotX

Bitte schön :)

Ich habe es mir nochmal angeschaut, und es ist besser wenn du anstatt "...the first plane started...", "...the first plane took of..." sagst.

Intelinside

21.11.2015, 15:31

@Intelinside

took off*

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