Englisch Präsentation über Amy Winehouse!

Hallo Leute ! Ich werde demnächst in Englisch eine Präsentation über Amy Winehouse halten . Ich benutze dafür PowerPoint. Könnt ihr vielleicht mal kurz durchlesen ,ob das in Ordnung ist oder ,ob da irgendwelche Grammatikfehler sind?

structure

1. little facts
2. family 3.career
3. health 5.cause of death

facts

• first name : Amy Jade

• last name : Winehouse

• zodiac sign : Virgo

• birth date : 14/09/1983

• death date : 23/07/2011

  family

• grew up in London with her mother,father and brother

• part of her family are russians

• many of her uncles were professional jazz musicians

• her grandmother Cynthia, was a singer

• her parents separated when she was nine

• lived with her mom

• stayed with her father and his girlfriend on weekends

• 2007 to 2009, she was married to Blake Fielder-Civil

  career

• she received singing lessons from her grandmother

• With twelve, she changed to a british school for young artist's

• With fiveteen,she had to change the school for the 5th time because of disruptive behavior

• With sixteen,she left the school and played in a jazz orchestra

• With eighteen,she completed her first contract with Iceland records

• 2003,her first album ''Frank'' came out

health

• she was a drug addict,because of her husband

• Alcohol problems

• mental problems

• self injury

• suffered from bulimia and anorexia

• End of 2008, she separated from Blake

• got clean

cause of death

• she was found dead in her apartment in London when she was twenty-seven

• Reason : alcohol poisoning with 4.16 per thousand in blood

Answer 1

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structure

**little** facts
family 3.career
health 5.cause of death

facts

first name : Amy Jade

last name : Winehouse

zodiac**al** sign : Virgo

birth date : 14/09/1983

death date : 23/07/2011

family

grew up in London with her mother,father and brother

part of her family **are**  

russians

many of her uncles were professional jazz musicians

her grandmother Cynthia **kein Komma** was a singer

her parents separated when she was nine

lived with her mom

stayed with her father and his girlfriend on weekends

**Hier fehlt eine Präposition.** 2007 to 2009, she was married to Blake Fielder-Civil

career

she **received** singing lessons from her grandmother

**With** twelve, she changed to a **b**ritish school for young artist**'s**

**With** f**iv**eteen, she had to change (**---**) school for the 5th time because of disruptive **behavior (= AE; BE = behaviour)**

**With** sixteen, she left  (**---**) school and played in a jazz orchestra

**With** eighteen, she **completed** her first contract with Iceland records

Hier fehlt eine Präposition. 2003, her first album ''Frank'' came out

health

she was a drug addict **kein Komma** because of her husband

Alcohol problems

mental problems

self injury

suffered from bulimia and anorexia

**At the e**nd of 2008, she separated from Blake

**got clean**

cause of death

she was found dead in her apartment in London when she was twenty-seven

Reason : alcohol poisoning with 4.16 **per thousand** in blood

Das Eingesternte muss korrigiert werden. Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.

Für das Vokabular und die Rechtschreibung empfehle ich ein gutes (online) Wörterbuch, z.B. pons.eu,

für die Grammatik ego4u.de und englisch-hilfen.de.

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