Verbesserung englischreferat Stonehenge

Ich musse in Referat über Stonhenge machen und haben schon einen Text geschrieben was drin vorkommt. Wäre nett wenn ihr Verbesserung im Satzbau und zu inhaltlichen informationen habt und Tempusfehler und soweiter Hier der Text:STONEHENGE

It is near of Salisbury and 187 km southwest of London. It was built in the end of the young-stone-age.

More than 600 people built Stonehenge. The Druids used it as a suntemple.

Around Stonehenge is a high wall. It is built of a sandstone circle with 60 stones and a bluestone circle with 66 stones, which are 1m high . In the middle is the Altarston , which is 3m long.

Stonehenge has a diameter of 110m. The Sandstones are from Marlborough Downs and the bluestones from Preseli Mountains. The stones have a weight about 20 tons. Many of the stones have fallen or been removed for road repair.

Stonehenge was built in 3 Steps: 1: 3100 BC They made a round wall and woodbuildings. 2: 2500 BC They changed the woodbuildings into stonebuildings 3: 1600 BC They added Sandstones and changed the position of the blue stones

In the end Stonehenge has 3 stone circels, a building with the form of a U and around It were 2 walls

Answer 1

[Wombats]

Ich würde statt so abgehackte Sätze mehr Links einbauen wie z.B. Moreover, Furthermore. Bsp: More than 600 people built Stonehenge. Furthermore the Druids used it as a suntemple.

Oder bspw.: Around Stonehenge is a high wall WHICH is built of a sandstone circle with 60 stones and a bluestone circle with 66 stones, which are 1m high.

Und statt so einfache Sätze wie der hier: In the middle is the Altarston , which is 3m long. Würde ich sagen: The Altarston of 3m length forms the middle of the Stonehenge. Moreover Stonehenge has a diameter of 110m... usw.

Comments

[Wombats]

Also was ich meine ist einfach ein wenig runder gestalten, das waren jetzt kleine Beispiele, du kannst das ja selbst besser machen.

Answer 2

[Salviadivina]

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at the end....

there is a high wall....

in the middle there is.....

a weight of about...

have fallen down....

steps

sandstones

circles

and around it there were...