Hi, da mein Business English nicht so gut ist, brauche ich eure Hilfe. Was kann an der Bewerbung verbessert werden.Vielen Dank :
Dear Sir or Madam,
after the pleasant phone call with Mr Mustermann, I would like to take the opportunity to introduce myself to you.
Through my training as a fashion designer and as a clerk for office communication, i bring both the specialist knowledge of garment and management/IT skills. (Advanced IT skills MS Office-package)
During my education as an fashion designer I learned a lot about material construction, processing technique and production from first sketch to a finished garment. I also have 2 years of professional experience as a secretary and have worked with data management systems.
In February 2022 I successfully completed further educaton as a pattermaker in woman ́s garment by ______. So I have the ability to fit a garment, too.
Domestic and International Travel are an enrichment for me. They bring variety and new impulses to my everyday work.
With me, your company will gain an employee who is a team player, flexible, keeps an overview in stressful situations, like to take responsibility and who has a great passion for sport and casual wear.
By being hired in your company, I hope for personal and professional growth, as well as improving my negotiation skills. Furthermore, I am looking forward for to exciting tasks and starting a career in an international team.
Now I would like to introduce myself to you personally and I am also looking forward to a trial workday where I can demonstrate my commitment and competence.
I'm available to start in April.
I am happy to hear from you.
Yours sincerely