Hey,
kann mir wer helfen und evt. Korrektur machen. Und findet ihr der Text ist gut für 11. Klasse Gynasium (bitte ehrlich sein, wäre das eine 1 wert?) vorallem kommasetzung bin ich mir unsicher und fällt vllt jemand noch ein schlusssatz ein?
danke
In the following essay I should give you an insight of me and my free time activities: First I want to introduce myself and my personality. My name is…. and I‘m currently seventeen years old. I was born on 9th may of 2006 in the hospital in…. . Since my birth I live in a small city part of…., called…. . I live there with my father and my two years younger sister. She looks like the same as me und we have a really good relationship. Furthermore I have an another sibling, namely an older sister. She lives in …. with her husband und my niece. Before I went to …. , I was on the … school in … and completed my secondary school certificate there. Now I will tell you a little bit more about my charakter. I am a friendly person who can empathize well with others. Additionally, my family and friends particularly appreciate my sense of responsibility because they can always rely on me. On the top of that I am also an organizational talent. My daily routine, for example, is very structured because I write to-do lists in order to keep an overview of everything. Last but not least my creative side is one of my greatest strengts, which reflects who I am as a person. So and thats a good point to redirect to my hobbies. Because being creative also makes up a lot of my free time. Therefore I especially to drawing and designing. This hobby relaxes me and relieves stress at the same time. Moreover I love shopping particularly in online shops. I spend a much of time on internet sides to buy clothes which I like but it makes me a little bit poor too. An another hobby from me is reading books. My favourite genre of books are thrillers. I like this genre because entire tension of content is maintained until the end and the interest in reading is not lost. At the moment I read the book Layla from Colleen Hover and so far I like it. Also I‘m interested in do ventures with my family and friends.
