Inhaltlich kann ich nichts dazu sagen, sprachlich ist mir folgendes aufgefallen:
- novel (wird klein geschrieben)
- "He plans to take his moms car and got drunk." - da hast du verschiedene Zeiten, die nicht zusammenpassen, in einem Satz; stattdessen würde ich sowas schreiben wie: He decides to take his mom's car, gets drunk and later crashes it.
- ...visits Sol in the evening
- She doesn't want to visit him with Alex. (falls das so gemeint ist)
- After a discussion about the high school, they dance and finally continue the way to the nursing home. (falls das so gemeint ist)
- He gives her feedback on the dress.
- Alex doesn't like it. (the dress)
- He realises that Sol looks better.
- After that, Alex wants to speak to Sol privately.
- All in all, the text is about Alex and Laurie visiting Sol...
LG 4paws