English Charakterisierung
Hey könnte mir einer sagen was ich noch verbessern kann, schreib morgen ne Englischarbeit. ;)
In the following text I tell you something about Agatha and her character. Agatha is a 36 years old and unattractive heavily-built woman, so that she search a long time ago for the ideal partner.Through it she get unconfident, it became obvious as she ask herself, why a handsome man write a letter to her. Moreover she is a little bit shy, because she look timidly as the look through the Café. Agatha is a punctual person too, cause she was at 3.00 at the Windham's Café. At the Café she wait along time, so that you can say she is patient. Because Agatha release a fake advertisement and send a fake picture, I must say that she is a cheater. All in all I can say that Agatha has a nice punctual and patient character, but she has a few mistakes too, like every other human.
Danke wäre echt nett wenn sich das einer angucken würde. :)
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ich denk mal der text ist gut. ganz am musst du schreiben in the following text i will tell you .... - du wirst ja reden deswegen :D (glaub ich zumindest) ich kenn zwar den text nicht aber denke dass du den charakter gut beschrieben hast ..
OMG!
In the following text I tell you something about Agatha and her character. Agatha is a 36-year-old and unattractive heavily-built woman, who has been searching for the ideal partner for a long time. (die lange nach dem idealen Partner gesucht hat).
As a result (= Folglich) / Therefore (= Deshalb) / Thus (= Dadurch) she has got unconfident. This becomes obvious when she wonders, why a handsome man writes a letter to her. Moreover she is a little (---) shy (kein Komma) because she looks timidly around the café. (weil sie sich schüchtern im Café umsieht).
Agatha is a punctual person too (kein Komma) because she is at 3.00 at the Windham's Café. Café hier nur dann großgeschrieben, wenn W’s Café ein Eigenname ist.
At the café she waits for a long time kein Komma so that you can say she is patient. **As (because ist kein Satzanfang.) Agatha places a fake advertisement and sends a fake picture, I must say that she is a cheater. All in all, I can say that Agatha is a nice punctual and patient person, but she has a few mistakes too, as every other human (being).
Schon vergessen - he/she/it das s muss mit! oder aber du wolltest im Past Tense schreiben, dann hast du aber das ed oder die 2. Verbform vergessen.
;-) AstridDerPu
Danke, aber eine Charakterisierung wird doch eigentlich im Simple Present geschriben oder?
Also eigentlich schon, aber denk doch mal nach. Wenn du im Deutschen eine Charakterisierung schreibst benutzt du nicht nur das Präsens!
Ja, größtenteils schon. Das Simple Present zeichnet sich aber nun einmal dadurch aus, dass in der 3. Person Einzahl (he/she/it) ein s ans Verb gehängt wird.
;-) AstridDerPu
Mit DIESEM Text ist Dir die Note 5 minus garantiert, weil, wie schon AstridDerPu JEDE Verbform falsch ist oder fehlt. Ist das eigentlich ein REFERAT? Denn "tell" passt schlecht zu einer Klassenarbeit...
Den Anfang mal richtig: ÜBERSCHRIFT: Agatha - a characterization.
Agatha is a 36-year-old woman who is heavily built and unattractive. So she has been searching for an ideal parthner for a long time already. ... (Dein folgender Satz ist völlig unverständlich).
Das soll auch keine Komplette Charkaterisierung sein, sonder nur eine kleine kurze. Wir werden nämlcih eine Short Story bekommen und dazu dann ne Charakterisierung schreiben, vill. ne Summary und noch Fragen zur Story.
Hallo nochmal,
aus den unendlichen Weiten des Internets:
How to write a characterization
A characterization is a description of all the features that make up a personality and its development. One can distinguish between two main methods:
• direct (explicit) characterization: the reader is told about a character’s personality directly by the author, by another character or by the character him/herself
• indirect (implicit) characterization: the reader is expected to draw conclusions about a character by studying his/her behaviour, opinions, choice of words and/or way of talking
Before you start working on your characterization find out how the character’s personality is revealed in the text. Possibilities:
• through the narrator’s description of his/her outward appearance
• through direct comments on his/her character
• by what he/she does, says or thinks
• by showing what other people think or say about him/her
Then collect the facts from the text and draw your conclusions about the person’s character! Look for…
• name, age, figure, clothes, height, sex
• language, nationality, general impression
• social background, family, kind of friends, profession
• what he/she does and says
• his/her behaviour (e.g. toward other characters) and actions
• thoughts, dreams, emotions, attitudes
• what other people say/think about him/her
Move from the outward features to the inward features/nature when writing your characterization. Do not forget to work with the text by using text reference and give examples for your findings, especially when you are working on the last four categories mentioned above.
Basically present tense is used in characterizations.
:-) AstridDerPu
In the following text I will tell you something about Agatha. Agatha is a 36 years old and unattractive heavily-built woman. She had been looking for the ideal partner for a long time.Through it she got unconfident, then one day a handsome man wrote her a letter and she asked herself, why a handsome man **would write a letter to her. She is also little bit shy, because she looked through the Café very nervously. Agatha is a punctual person too, because (ACHTUNG!) she was at the Windham's Café at** 3.00** (pm, am ? ) . At the Café she was waiting for a long time, so you could say she is a patient person. Because Agatha released a fake advertisement and sent a fake picture, I must say that she is a cheater. All in all I can say that Agatha has a nice punctual and patient character, she's not perfect, but we all have our own little idiosyncrasies.
Insgesamt ist dein Text ganz gut, aber es gibt auch einiges daran auszusetzen. Die Zeitformen solltest du dir auf jeden Fall nochmal anschauen. Außerdem rate ich dir im Internet nach Tipps & Tricks für Charakterisierungen zu suchen. Das hilft dir bestimmt. Allgemein denke ich, dass du die Zusammenhänge klarer machen solltest, sodass ein nicht informierter Mensch, den Text versteht und somit "Agatha" kennenlernt. Denn als ich den Text gelesen habe, musste ich mir einiges selber zusammenreimen, was bei einer Charakterisierung auf keinen Fall sein sollte !
Wie kann der Text gut sein, wenn keine einzige Verb/Zeitform korrekt ist?
:-( AstridDerPu