Charakterisierung auf englisch?
Hallo,
ich übe zurzeit in Englisch für die Schule und habe eine Charakterisierung geschrieben. Würde mich freuen wenn einer diese bewerten könnte und mir tipps geben könnte was ich besser machen kann und was ich vermeiden sollte.
In the text "Greyhound Tragedy" written by Richard
Brautigan, a girl (Der name wird nicht gesagt) is the main charakter. The person
seems to be to romantic and not realistic at all. She dreams
every day how she will go to hollywood and become a famous
star and that she wants to die there. But her behaviour shows
that she has no clue what she would actually do if she would go
to hollywood. She thinks that she would instantly become
a star just by going there. This gives the impression
that she is a silly person because of how she is acting.
Besides that, she is dependent on her parents because she is to
lazy to find a job, instead the girl likes to read magazines and watch
movies. The girl is also is extremly anxious and even to afraid
to ask the bus driver how much a ticket costs.
To sum up, one can say that the girl is a lazy, foolish,
silly and anxious person and that she is to scared to even
try to make her dream come true.
--Mir ist selber aufgefallen, dass ich zu oft "she" verwende.
1 Antwort
In the text "Greyhound Tragedy" written by Richard Brautigan, a girl (which remains nameless) is the main character. The young woman seems to be a dreamer. [...] But her behaviour shows that she has no clue what she would actually do. She thinks that she would instantly become a star just by going there. This gives the impression that the story-"heroine" is a silly person because of the way she's acting.
Additionally, she is dependent on her parents, because she is too lazy to find a job. Instead, the girl likes to read magazines and watch movies. The girl is also extremly anxious and even too afraid to ask the bus driver for the price of a ticket.
To sum up, one can say that the main character of the story is a lazy, foolish, silly and anxious person and that she's too scared to even try to make her dream come true.
Ich habe alle Änderungen, die ich machen würde, fett kursiv gesetzt. Insgesamt ist es eine sehr gute Charakterisierung - aber ich habe bemerkt, dass Du offenbar Probleme mit der Verwendung von "to" und "too" hast :) In jedem einzelnen Fall, wo es too heißen muss, hast Du es falsch geschrieben.
