Kann jemand mein Charakterisierung in Englisch korrigieren?
ich brauche hilfe da ich nicht so gut in englisch bin.
In the Novel “Speak”, written by Laurie Halse Anderson in 1999, is the character “Mr. Freeman” an art teacher at Merryweather High, who already gets introduced at one of the first chapters. He is the art teacher from the main character Melinda.
Mr. Freeman is a teacher, described as ugly. Furthermore he has a “Big old grasshopper body, like a stilt-walking circus guy and an nose like a credit card …” like Melinda describes at p.14, l.9 f., . He appears very scary to other people, but he has a nice smile on his face (p. 14, l.11 & p. 14, l.21 ff.).
Another important fact is his language, he speaks really heartfelt (p.14 l.12 ff.), which makes him so interesting , so the students listen to him.
During the novel Mr. Freeman is an supporter of Melinda and they talk about Melindas problems sometimes. He sees the feelings or the art in Melindas work (p.66-67). Besides Mr. Freeman is very creative and he wants others to be creative too (p. 15 – 16). Moreover he wants to motivate the students to make something special. On p.14 l. 11 you can see that Mr. Freeman “smiles”. Their, you can conclude that he is a very friendly person
Mr. Freeman is a different person. He is not like normal teachers and he has his own vision of school, lessons and priorities (p. 14 – 15). His ideas are very scary but he has a plan for the rest of the year in school (p. 15, ll.20 ff. & p.16, ll.1 ff.) .
He has a good friendship to his students, which you can see that he is hugging students as a teacher(p.196 l.10 ff.). The last day of school Melinda stays after so she could finally put the finishing touches on her tree and she starts crying in the class with Mr.Freeman and he says "You've been through a lot haven't you?"(p.197 l.24 f.), that shows that he actually cares about Melinda and what she has been through. In other words he has a good connection to Melinda.
In conclusion Mr. Freeman is the art teacher of Melinda, who has a good connection to Melinda, he is a friendly teacher, who goes motivated on
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In the Novel “Speak” written by Laurie Halse Anderson in 1999. The character “Mr. Freeman” is an art teacher at Merryweather High. He is the art teacher of the main character Melinda and is introduced in one of the first chapters.
Mr. Freeman is a teacher who is described as ugly. Furthermore, he has a “Big old grasshopper body, like a stilt-walking circus guy and an nose like a credit card …” p.14, l.9 f., . He also appears to be very scary to other people, but he seems to have a nice smile on his face (p. 14, l.11 & p. 14, l.21 ff.).
Another important fact is his use of language(p.14 l.12 ff.)which makes the students want to listen to him
During the novel Mr. Freeman is a supporter of Melinda and they sometimes talk about Melindas problems. He sees the feelings in the drawings in Melinda's work (p.66-67). Besides Mr. Freeman is very creative and he wants others to also be creative (p. 15 – 16). Moreover he wants to motivate the students to make something special. On p.14 l. 11 you can see that Mr. Freeman “smiles”. There you can conclude that he is a very friendly person
Mr. Freeman is a different person. He is not like normal teachers and he has his own vision of school, lessons and priorities (p. 14 – 15). His ideas are very scary but he has a plan for the rest of the schoolyear (p. 15, ll.20 ff. & p.16, ll.1 ff.) .
He has a good friendship with his students, which you can see by him hugging his students(p.196 l.10 ff.). The last day of school Melinda stays longer than needed so that she could finally put the finishing touches to her painting. Afterwards she starts crying in the class with Mr.Freeman and he says "You've been through a lot haven't you?"(p.197 l.24 f.), that shows that he actually cares about Melinda and what she has been through. In other words he has a good connection to Melinda.
In conclusion, Mr. Freeman is the art teacher of Melinda, who has a good connection to Melinda, and he seems to be a friendly teacher, who goes motivated motivates his students.
Tipps:Schreib kürzere Sätze, im Englischen versucht man lange Sätze zu meiden und man verschachtelt diese auch nicht so wie im Deutschen. Zudem würde ich dir empfehlen die Beistriche wegzulassen. Ich habe bestimmt nicht alle Fehler gefunden, wenn du das nächste Mal nicht weist, ob du eine Formulierung so schreiben kannst, google sie vorher findest google keine Anwendung musst du es umformulieren.
In the Novel (RS) “Speak”, written by Laurie Halse Anderson in 1999, is the character “Mr. Freeman” an art teacher at Merryweather High (Satzstellung), who already (Position) gets introduced at (Wort) one of the first chapters. He is the art teacher from (Wort, Grammatik) the main character Melinda.
Mr. Freeman is (---) described as ugly. Furthermore (Komma) he has a “Big old grasshopper body, like a stilt-walking circus guy and an (RS) nose like a credit card …” like (Wort) Melinda describes at (Wort) p.14, l.9 f., . He appears (Wort) very scary to other people, but he has a nice smile on his face (p. 14, l.11 & p. 14, l.21 ff.).
Another important fact is his language, he speaks really heartfelt (Formulierung, Grammatik) (p.14 l.12 ff.), which makes him so interesting, so the students listen to him.
During the novel(Komma) Mr. Freeman is an (RS) supporter of Melinda and they talk about Melindas (Grammatik) problems sometimes (Position). He sees the feelings or the art in Melindas (Grammatik) work (p.66-67). Besides(Komma) Mr. Freeman is very creative and he wants others to be creative too (p. 15 – 16). Moreover(Komma) he wants to motivate the students to make (Wort) something special. On p.14 l. 11 you can see that Mr. Freeman “smiles”. Their (Wort, Grammatik), you can conclude that he is a very friendly person(Punkt)
Mr. Freeman is a different person. He is not like normal teachers and he has his own vision of school, lessons and priorities (p. 14 – 15). His ideas are very scary(Komma) but he has a plan for the rest of the year in (Ich bevorzuge at) school (p. 15, ll.20 ff. & p.16, ll.1 ff.).
He has a good friendship to his students, which you can see that (Formulierung) he is hugging students as a teacher(p.196 l.10 ff.). The last day of school(Komma) Melinda stays after so she could (Grammatik) finally put the finishing touches on her tree and she starts crying in the class with Mr.Freeman and he says "You've been through a lot haven't you?"(p.197 l.24 f.) (Punkt, neuer Satz) that shows that he actually cares about Melinda and what she has been through. In other words(Komma) he has a good connection to Melinda.
In conclusion(Komma) Mr. Freeman is the art teacher of Melinda, who has a good connection to Melinda (mit and anbinden und Melinda durch Pronomen ersetzen), he is a friendly teacher, who goes motivated on (???)
Das Fettgedruckte muss korrigiert werden. Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.
Für das Vokabular und die Rechtschreibung empfehle ich ein gutes (online) Wörterbuch, z.B. pons.com,
für die Grammatik ego4u.de und englisch-hilfen.de - und Finger weg vom Google Übelsetzer und seinen tr.tteligen Kollegen!
:-) AstridDerPu
Ich habs ohne irgendein Übersetzer geschrieben, aber trotzdem vielen dank :)