Erörterung Schuluniform Englisch

Hallo ich präsentiere euch jetzt meine Erörterung, ich wollte euch fragen ob ihr es dann beurteilen könnt ob der Inhalt gut ist und ob ich viele Grammatikalische Fehler habe oder sprachliche Fehler und dann am ende mir eine Note nennt zwischen 1-6 wäre klasse von euch

Should schooluniform be introduced in every school?

In the following text I will list several arguments for and against schooluniform. The thesis to this topic is that schooluniform has lots of disadvantages.The first argument to this antithesis is that it is unhygiencally because you cant wash they not every day. An example you have not so many uniforms at home and you cant not wash them because they would not be dry for the next day. The second argument is that the free development of the pupils is limited. For example they would not be trust what they would dress because they think than it is emberrassing . The last argument to this antithesis is that schooluniform can also lead to competetion and conflicts between different schools. For example a pupil they visited a another school and went from pupils from different school past and they check it that he are from a different school because the schooluniform discern from another school uniformsand then can also lead to a competetion and conflicts.

Of the other hand they are a lot of advantages for schooluniforms. The first argument to this thesis is that they cant readable ther finacial situation. For example if there was none schooluniform than would can be readable ther financial situation because they would not be achieve bran name clothes. A antoher argument is that it would be saves time in the morning . An example the pupil didnt know what he would be dress and than can it to came that he came late to school . The last argument they are for me very strong is that nobody became bulling by clothes.. An example a poor pupil cant not achieve brand name clothes or his clothes are very old and have a lot of holes and therefore they cant be bullied for clothes.

After listing all the arguments for and against schooluniform think I not every school not to lead schooluniform in schools because for me it is important that you can deside what you will dress.The reason ist that then became th self confidence stronger.

Das ist meine Erörterung gerne Verbesserungsvorschläge z.B wenn ich was nicht gut formuliert habe mich verbessern damit ich das beim nächsten mal besser mache :)

3 Antworten

Gehirnzellen

26.05.2015, 21:06

Hört sich an wie ein Text, den man vom Google Übersetzer kopiert hat. Tut mir Leid, aber dein Englisch ist wirklich ziemlich schlecht.

- Ich würde an deiner Stelle versuchen einen interessanteren Einstieg zu finden, als dieses "Das ist mein Text über Schuluniformen"

- Wenn du ein Beispiel nennst, musst du nicht immer an example schreiben. Man sollte beim Lesen eigentlich merken, dass du ein Beispiel erwähnst. Und sonst kann man den Text ja auch mit Absätzen strukturieren. Genau so bei den Argumenten. Versuch da bessere Übergänge zu finden als First, Second, Third, Next oder Last Argument.

- Deine Argumentation ist falsch aufgebaut. Im Fazit schreibst du ja, dass du gegen Schuluniformen bist und fängst mit Argumenten dagegen an. Normalerweise sind Argumentationen so aufgebaut, dass du mit dem stärksten Argument der Gegenseite anfängst, dann zum schwächsten kommst, mit deinem schwächsten Argument anfängst und mit dem stärksten Argument zu deiner Meinung aufhörst.

- Du solltest mehr als jeweils nur einen Satz zu den Argumenten und Beispielen schreiben und deine Ideen dazu genauer beschreiben. Deine Meinung ist auch etwas zu kurz und sollte mehr auf die Argumentation eingehen.

The thesis to this topic is that school uniforms have lots of disadvantages.

The first argument to this antithesis (finde ich hier von der Bedeutung unpassend, du hast ja keine richtige These aufgestellt) is that it is unhygienic because you cant wash them every day.

An example you have not so many uniforms at home and you cant not (wenn du schon can`t schreibst musst du nicht noch mal not schreiben. So würde da can not not stehen.) wash them because they would not be dry for the next day.

The second argument is that the free development of the pupils is limited. Ist grundsätzlich nicht falsch allerdings würde ich genauer darauf eingehen. Also z.B. they can't develop their own fashion sense oder can't express their personality.

For example they would not be trust what they would dress because they think than it is embarrassing. Der Satz ist so falsch, dass ich nicht mal wirklich weiß, was du damit sagen willst.

The last argument to this antithesis is that school uniforms can also lead to competetion and conflicts between different schools.

For example a pupil they visited a another school and went from pupils from different school past and they check it that he are from a different school because the schooluniform discern from another school uniformsand then can also lead to a competetion and conflicts. Der Satz macht ebenfalls überhaupt keinen Sinn. Finde auch nicht, dass dieses "Konflikte zwischen verschiedenen Schulen durch die Uniform" ein gut nachvollziehbares Argument ist und würde da deshalb noch mal genauer drauf eingehen.

On the other hand there are a lot of advantages of school uniforms.

The first argument to this thesis is that they can't readable (ergibt im Zusammenhang keinen Sinn. Du könntest sowas wie can't show their financial status/situation schreiben, den kann man aber noch an anderen Dingen als der Kleidung erkennen) their financial situation.

For example if there were no school uniforms then would/can (du musst dich schon für ein von beiden entscheiden) be readable (ergibt wie gesagt keinen Sinn in diesem Zusammenhang) their financial situation because they would not be achieve (Ist hier auch nicht das richtige Wort. Achieve würde in diesem Zusammenhang bedeuten, dass man sich etwas leisten kann und das kann man trotz Schuluniform ja immer noch. Can't wear oder can't brag (=angeben, prahlen) wäre besser) brand name clothes.

An other argument is that it would save time in the morning.

An example the pupil doesn't know what he wants to wear/ how he should dress and therefore/as a result/because of that he would be late for school.

The last argument which is very strong for me is that nobody (ist richtig aber ich würde in einem eher formalen Text no one nehmen) gets bullied because of their clothes.

An example a poor pupil can't achieve brand name clothes or his clothes are very old and have a lot of holes. If they had school uniforms he could not be bullied because of his clothes.

After listing all the arguments for and against school uniforms I think not every school needs school uniform in schools because for me it is important that you can decide how you want to dress. The reason ist that because of that the self confidence stronger.

RiDvanC10

Fragesteller

26.05.2015, 21:29

Danke für die zahlreichen Tipps ich werde es jetzt überarbeiten und mir merken danke das du dir Zeit genommen hast und es dir genau durch gelesen hast :)

Adomox

26.05.2015, 19:11

Hallo RiDvanC10,

Deine englische Ausdrucksweise klingt sehr, sehr deutsch; soll heißen, dass Syntax (Satzbau) und Ausdrücke teilweise komplett dem Deutschen entsprechen, was auf Englisch leider keinen Sinn ergibt bzw. falsch ist.

Zum Beispiel:

[...]and than can it to came that he came late to school.

[...]und dann kann es dazu kommen, dass er spät zur Schule kommt.

besser wäre z.B.: [...] so one might be late for school.

Generell solltest du darauf achten, nicht immer wieder die gleichen Satzanfänge zu verwenden (For example etc.). Konjunktionen sind hier die passenden Helfer, und hilfreiche Listen dieser findest du sicher schnell über Google oder hier: http://www.englisch-hilfen.de/grammar/konjunktionen.htm

Außerdem solltest du beachten, dass can't bereits verneint ist; can't not = cannot not (ursprünglich *can not not) wäre also eine doppelte Verneinung = verstärkte Bejahung.

Ich würde dir deinen Text korrigieren, allerdings wäre er dann sehr anders als der jetzige, was ja nicht Sinn der Übung ist :)

Ich hoffe, ich konnte dir ein paar Anregungen zur Verbesserung geben, denn so perfekt wie eine andere Antwort deine Erörterung beschreibt, ist sie leider nicht.

Woher ich das weiß:Studium / Ausbildung – Doktor der Englischen Sprachwissenschaft

RiDvanC10

Fragesteller

26.05.2015, 23:03

Ja konntest du vielen dank.Schreibe morgen eine klausur, hätte ich das hier früher gefragt ,damit ich mehr zeit habe das genau zu lernen :)

NadineAmy

26.05.2015, 18:30

Hey, in welcher Klassenstufe und Schule bist du? Ich finde sie eigentlich gut :D Würde eine 1-2 geben, da du noch ein paar Schreib-/ Grammatikfehler drin hast :)

RiDvanC10

Fragesteller

26.05.2015, 18:33

Hi, vielen dank ich besuche das Berusfsgrundschlujahr in einem Berufskolleg um meinen Realschulabschluss zu erreichen. Ja genau das ist meine schwäche :(

NadineAmy

26.05.2015, 18:39

@RiDvanC10

Das ist doch nicht so schlimm :) Ich finde die Struktur echt super und du hast aussagekräftige Argumente!!

         Every school should demand school uniform

In some countries all over the world school children have to wear uniforms the color scheme and style varies from school to school. In other countries pupils can wear to school what ever clothes they choose. In those countries it could be difficult to introduce school uniforms, because they are not traditionally used to wearing one. In the following essay I want to discuss the advantages to introduce school uniforms world wide.

In my opinion school uniforms ind schools are positive but negative too because not every student have the same style and they cant decide which school uniforms they wanted to wear.

School uniforms are on the one side good because a lot of children are victims of bullying because some of theme haven’t enough money to buy expensive and nice clothes. In this case the school uniform is very practically and maybe a good problem-solving.

On the other side pupils cant find our style and have to wear clothes that they don’t wanted. School uniforms can be nice but not every day ,It quickly becomes boring .However, there are people around the world for which it is too expensive ,always to buy a school uniform. Children grow fast and because of that they have to buy an again and again. We must take into account that the school uniform is maybe expensive but the clothes that the kids need for school is not cheaper and they have to be buy again and again, too.

On the other hand if the pupils wear school uniforms there is not a difference between rich and poor.

I have come to the conclusion that school uniforms are not everywhere positive and children should be able to develop their own style. Cause the bully is not reduced by a school uniform.

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wer kennt sich von euch in english gut aus .?

Könnt ihr bitte meinen Txt durchlesen und wenn ihr einen Fehler findet es mir sagen. Ich bedanke mich für eure Hilfe und bedanke mich im Voraus

Nowadays there are many discussions about school uniforms. In the following comment I will discuss advantages and disadvantages about school uniforms. The main argument is, that uniforms are good for the school because wearing them stops violence and helps to develope a sense of pride in the students. The contra argument is, that uniforms cost a lot of money and are not always suitable for the weather. These are not the only reasons that students have to worry about. They would need to buy additional clothing to wear after school and that would be really expensive. From my point of view the pro argument is really convincing, because the bullies can´t bully another student, because they wear the same uniforms. Moreover, I think that this is a point which is really important for all of us. Additionally, a powerful argument is that they don´t need to think about how to dress in the morning. It's my opinion that uniforms are helpful because the students respect each other.

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Kann jemand bitte mein comment anschauen und sagen welche Fehler ich gemacht habe, da ich am Dienstag ein comment in einer Klausur schreiben muss?

Nowadays social networks are used by people all over the world. They use them to stay in contact with their friends or family, get information about what’s happening in other parts of the world or just to bore something away. But there are also some negative facts, for example are social media also used for bullying. In the following I’m going to comment whether teenagers can agree or can’t agree if social media are good for them, also including the article „ Forty-five percent of teens are online ‚almost constantly’ – and they don’t know if it’s good for them“ written by Abby Ohlheiser published in the Washington Post on 31 may, 2018.

First off all, social media are the best option for humans to express new possibilities for their future. They can find new attractions and places in the world, which they would never have heard of.

Second, social networks are often used to find out the answer to questions, when not knowing the answer. Most of the people just take out their mobile phones, type it in and then they can read the answer.

Third, social media are used to stay in contact with your friends, even if they move or travel.On the other side there are also negative points, for example that there aren’t just websites with goog thoughts, like websites where violence or sexual content is shown. Furthermore it has to be mentioned that there are people, mostly men, who get on these websites and don’t do legitimate things.On top of that, there are teenagers, who use social network platforms to bully their classmates. For this they use networks where you can write anonymously.

Weighing the pros and cons, I come to the decision, that social media isn’t a big problem for teenagers, if there are rules, which have to be followed and controlled by humans and / or machines.On top I think that social media should even be more popular, so that parents also know about it, so that they can teach their children about the problems.

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English argumentative wirting

Ich gehe zurzeit in die 9. Klasse eines Gymnasiums und ich habe eine 5 in Englisch. Daher würde ich mich sehr freuen wenn ihr mir bitte folgenden Text korrigieren würdet. Könntet ihr mir bitte folgenden Text korrigieren:

Today nearly every kid under 13 years has an own smartphone. But is that good for the kids? Some people say smartphones are good for kids and their developing. There are some people saying the kids should learn the technic of smartphones in young age for example to learn for their future job or for school. The childrens could learn in this age how impotant and useful the internet is for example they could learn for school by games and websites like togolino.de. Other people think the childrens in this age could learn for school in smartphones for example with apps. However tere are other people, thinking the comletly opposite. This people have the suspicion that the children could visit websites where they are still under age for example a child could go to a website for pornographic or violency things. The kids should not become an own smartphone because kids in this age should play outside with real friends and not with virtual friends in games for example a kid which is going outside to play is more social than a kid which is sitting all the day at home. When parents pay so much money for a smartphone the kid could lose it for example in sandpit. After looking at both sides I think there are mor disadvantages than advantages for having a smartphone under 13 years. That`s why children in this age should not have an own smartphone. In my opinion parents who buy a smartphone for a child are stupid and irresponsible because they damage the life of their own child.

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Englisch Hausaufgabe Written Discussion Verbesserungsvorschläge?

Ich muss als Hausaufgabe eine Written Discussion schreiben. Könnte jemand über meine drüberschauen und sie Verbessern oder mir tipps geben wie ich sie besser machen kann ?

Aufgabenstellung: The Government plans to ration the usage of cars per person per year. Discuss this programme and suggest wyays to cope with car-related pollution.

There are some arguments for and against rationing the usage of cars per person per year.

First, people would have to use busses or trains more ofthen in small cities that would cause full busses and trains, because they do not have enough busses everywhere. People have to find a bus or train that comes to the rigth time to the rigth place.

Second. In Germany, we have to pay for our car taxes every year or we aren't allowed to use it. If we can only use it a bit, it would get much too expensive for that.

Another argument against is, that people who have to earn money by driving cars, will get problems. For example how could a taxi driver earn enough money for food, if he is not allowed to drive a car as ofthen as he wants to?

A good argument for rationing the usage of cars is, it would reduce the bad pollution from the cars, because they aren't used every day.

Another good argument for rationing the usage of cars is, we would have less traffic. That means that the people who are driving at that day can drive faster and there are no traffic jams anymore.

The last argument for is, the rushhour would not cause traffic jams when more people go by bus or train, so everyone comes punktual for work and can sleep longer, because they are faster.

On the one hand busses and trains might be full, but you can also ride your bike, so you will get no problems.

As conclusion I would say, the arguments for rationing the usage of cars are better than the arguments against, but there have to be special laws for people who earn their money by driving, like taxi drivers.

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Passt der Englische Text?

In the poem ‚,The Schoolboy‘‘ by William Blake, you get a clear message that the schoolboy doesn’t enjoy the school and its system at all, so the question that arises is ,,What could school do, to be more enjoyable for the schoolboy and students like me?‘‘

First of all many students have to wake up early in the morning, which isn’t a perfect start into the day. Furthermore they mostly can’t enjoy the morning even if they like to stand up early, because they must get finished quickly for school. To counteract this problem, it would be a good start to begin with school less early and to approach the day more calmly. So to remove the effect of a prison it’s important to produce a more peaceful environment for everyone, to make the classrooms more comfortable and even integrate some outdoors schoollessons in spring and summer, so that the pupils have more joy in learning and are able to concentrate more because of the fresh air and the nature. Last but not least we schoolboys anf schoolgirls should be allowed to have more own thoughts and to be able to control them and not just being forced to memorize things, which won’t be even important for our adulthood.

I also think that the last point which is beinh made here, is a fact which the author want to draw attention to, because it’s a mostly international problem that should has to change as we are not robots.

(Also mit dem letzten Teil bin ich eher unzufrieden weil so oft which drankommt)

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Erörterung englisch überprüfen

hallo :) ich habe eine Erörterung zum Thema Schuluniformen für den englisch unterricht geschrieben, wäre cool wenn ihr mir Tipps zur Grammatik und vielleicht auch Ergänzungen sagen könntet. hier ist sie:

This comment will be about school uniforms. in the USA for example there are schools where you have to wear school uniforms and in germany you dont have to wear them. now the question is if we should introduce school uniforms in germany?

On the one hand school uniforms are very good. when everyone wears the same, nobody can say things because of their look like. so there is less bullying at school. nobody recognize if someone is poor or rich and it's easier for poorer people to find friends. In addition to this the students are a community. All of them are working together. Without school uniforms there are allways some outsider which have to work alone. the class is not divided into cool and not cool but there is a single group. also the school is represented by the students when they wear uniforms. all looks the same and the whole school hold together. everybody can see which school it is.

But on the other hand school uniforms are not very helpful. you can not wear what you want and you can not have your own style. But this is very important at this age. students have to develop their own personalities. moreover you can not stop bullying. maybe it is reduced by school uniforms but you can never stop it forever. there are students who does not look good with them or they are bullied because of their behavior. in addition, bullying takes place in the free time of students. so outsider are only in school protected. above all it is very expensive. families have to buy these uniforms and they are not cheap. when you have more than one child, it becomes more expensive. after school most of the students wear normal clothes. so you have to buy both - school uniforms and clothes for the free time. everyone changes the outfit once per day. it is very expensive for poor families. maybe their children have to wear the uniform the whole day.

danke schonmal:)

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Ein Comment auf Englisch schreiben

Hallo, ich soll in Englisch mein erstes Comment schreiben. Es wäre supernett, wenn ihr euch es mal durchlesen könntet. Über Verbesserungsvorschläge( also Formulierung oder Rechtschreibung oder auch noch einen Pro/contra Punkt den ihr wichtig findet oder etwas anderes) würde ich mich sehr freuen ;) Das Thema das wir vorgeschrieben bekommen haben war: Rules in our everyday life

A Comment

Rules are a very important thing in our life. I believe it´s very important to discuss this topic. For everything in our life we have rules, for example speed limits or curfews. But, are we too obsessed with safety in our everyday life? Or have we got too few rules?

Rules for speed limits for instance are very important. If there are not rules for that, life will change. Everything will be very dangerous. Everybody would drive as fast as they want and there would be more accidents.
Another pro is, that without rules you will early be dead, there will be too much risk in our everyday life.
But there does not only exists pros, on the other hand there are also cons. Without the rules we will have more freedom. We would have much more fun with fever rules.
Secondly there are too much rules for teenager. It is tempting to break them and the teenager can not have so much fun as without rules, because they are not allowed to stay all the night long at partys or to go late in the cinema.

To my mind, most of the rules are very important in our everyday life and we have not got too few rules and are not obsessed with safety.

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Brexit-essay?

Hallo! In Englisch sollen wir einen Aufsatz über den Brexit schreiben. Kann jemand meinen durchlesen und mir vielleicht Tipps geben, was ich besser machen kann oder Beispiele hinzufügen?

Unthinkable. The UK no longer belongs to the EU. The exit was completed and after long negotiations England is outside the EU. Many Britons voted "Yes to Brexit" in the elections, despite the fact that only half of the population understood what they were voting for. After less than a year, the British noticed the enormous consequences and their ex-partner EU for help.

Firstly, the UK can regain its sovereignty, making it the controlling influence of having supreme authority.

Besides, the UK could follow Norway’s example and still trade with the EU even if they are not part of the EU.

Moreover, being free from restrictions would be beneficial. They could make their own laws and control immigration.

On the other hand, there are many arguments against the Brexit.

Initially, many Britains could lose their jobs. If their job is linked to the EU and the job is no longer needed, then millions of them must look out for a new job.

Furthermore, Britain could lose its influence. As part of the European Union, member states have more power than being a middle-ranking country. If we glance back at history, we can see that the UK has lost a lot of his power, meaning that it would lose even more.

Besides, leaving the EU will make the UK politically and economically suffer. Britain used to be the EU’s main trading partner. Leaving would mean that they are not enabled to move goods, services and people like they did before. They will also become an outsider.

Considering the pros and cons, I think it is hard to make a decision. As with so many things, only time will tell whether the Brexit was right or wrong. It is also not certain that other states will not leave the UK. In my opinion, the member states primarily see the financial advantage of the EU, but if sovereignty is more important to the UK, I can totally understand that.

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Englisch Written Discussion Verbesserungsvorschläge

Boot Camps in Germany !!!

Some people mean that the boot camps in the USA a good idea , but should be boot camps introduced in germany ?

Many people and parents says that boot camps are very good , because boot camps helps troublemakers to learn discipline. And when they learn discipline the crime rate will be go down. Second, the lessons in the school will be more quiet and than the students can better learn and have than better marks. As well the children will be trained they physical fitness and they learn to live healthy. When they used to the circumstances in boot camps, they will live in that way , when leaving the camp.

However, other people and parents are against boot camps, because they think that the children soon forget about boot camp and get in trouble again. Another argument against is the cost ! If boot camps are built in germany, the state would have many costs. The last argument is that many people say that children didnt learn discipline but should have been broken. People say that the boot camps are to hard for children and that the teachers in the camps are too strict.

After looking at both sides I think that boot camps shouldnt be built in germany. The advantages are very good, but the disadvantages are predominant.

Verbesserungsvorschläge für diesen Text wären hilfreich :)

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Todesstrafe (Death Penalty) Englisch Text

Hallo, Ist der Text gut?

Death Penalty: Today I would like to write something about death penalty which still exists in some parts of the world. It's for murderers or people who have committed other bad crimes. Relating to this I would like to explain my personal opinion.

On the one hand, I think it's a fair punishment for rapists. They rape others and damage the life to the victims. As a punishment they only get arrested for some years, which is too mild. Furthermore, their psyche is already damaged and if they then get arrested, they'll be crazy when they leave the prison.

Another argument for the death penalty is that it scares people off. If, for example, someone gets killed, all the others would premeditated whether they will commit a crime too. If you realize that it was the wrong one, you're not able to do anything. Moreover, you should think logical. Even if you kill someone, the victim is still dead so the situation doesn't change.

All in all, I think the Death Penalty is a good sanction for murder, terrorism and for running amok.

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Englisch ( Text Hilfe )

Hallo ihr lieben :) ich wollte mal fragen wie ihr den Text findet. Und was ich eventuell verbessern kann. Ich bin in der 9. klasse.

A young mayor? I want to talk about the cons and the pros of a young mayor. An advantage is, that he is an energetic person who knows the interests of young People. Another point is that maybe more young persons would get interest in politics, because of the young mayor. But on the other side he would not have so much experience.

Much free time is really important for a young person. But a young mayor would not have time for studies and for free time activities. Thereby he might lose friend. It would be very difficult, because he has to do more than one job, because a mayor is not paid very well.
Another problem is, that he would be too young to understand older people. And maybe the older people in the city do not accept him as 'boss'.

To my mind a young mayor is a bad idea, because he can not represent the 'whole' city. The responsibility is too high for a young person. And he would not has enought experience to deal with money.

Würde mich über ein Feedback freuen :) Danke im voraus.

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Englisch Text korriegieren

Hallo kann jemand folgenden Text korrigieren? Dankeschön Dear Ben Russell, I read your article “Credit cards to ration individuals' carbon use“, which is published in newspaper The Independent in July19,2006. First of all I want to say that I think it's very good that there are people like you who think about the environment and of course about the problems which are exist. The suggestion is that every body has a credit-card with Carbon Dioxide points and if someone travels, use electricity, gas or petrol with carbon rations they have to pay. There is a special amount of this points and if you need more than your personal cap you have to buy credits on the open market. On the other side if there are people who cut the pollution of the carbon they produce, they could sell their surplus. Mr Miliband also suggests that banning products like light bulbs or electrical appliances which waste power while on standby, have to forbid. Everyone have to make automatic payments of offset pollution. I think this credit cards are not a good idea, because there would be a discrimination, because on the one hand rich people wouldn't cut their consume because they have the money to buy this credits. The most of them wouldn't take care about the environment. On the other hand the poor people have to take care about their carbon use. They haven't got the money to buy new credits. The result would be that the poor people take care and the richer people don't take care. Now you can say that it's maybe not a completely good result but now there are a few people who take care. Better than no one. But what is if the poorer people have to use the car everyday because they have to drive to work. They have to pay that they are working. This wouldn't make work more attractive. The poorer people are disadvantaged. Another cause why this credit cards are not a good idea is that you can't control it. There would be a lot of situations where are disagreements. For example if people drive together to work. Now who have to pay with carbon for that? The driver or the other ones? Another fact is that you can't handle everything with money. Everyone has to pay that the environment become better. But money doesn't help. You can't stop the global warming with money. My idea is that there have to be recompenses for those people who do something against the environment problems. There have to be individual things, which make environment protection very attractive and also necessary. It's very important that everybody knows about the problems and the results if we go on like this. All in all I think it's very good that there are people who think about a solution and things that can be do to stop the global warming. Nevertheless I think the credit-cards and money wouldn't be a good solution

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Comment correction?

Hallo, und zwar musste ich ein comment schreiben in der Schule, welchen wir morgen vorzeigen müssen und ich wollte fragen ob einer vlt nochmal kurz denn comment überfliegen kann ob alles so passt.

A Few days ago there was a discussion if mobil phones and other electronic devices should be allowed at school. The pros are that even in school children can be shown how to behave on the internet. Another good argument for using mobil phones at school is that it's possible to quickly find information and work with it. The last and for me best argument is that through digital media, topics are dealt with holistically. Different points of view are taken into account and a solution is sought with different formats. The cons are that teacher can't check what the students gonna do on the smartphones and if they really being used for lessons or assignment. Another bad thing would be that if the permanent use at school is allowed, the risk of mobile phone addiction increases enormously. The for me worse thing would be that if Students didn't own a smartphone they would have a big disadvantage. My personal view is that the mobile phones should be allowed but not all the time only when the teacher allowed it, because mobil phones can be a good addition to the school.

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