Englisch Zeitungsartikel Pollution/Environment - bitte um Korrektur?
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Earth is becoming "Planet Plastic"!Can we still save our planet?
Author, 23th of November 2019
We create more and more pollution. Air, water, land and soil pollution effect all of us. Can we still manage to save our planet?
We are creating more pollution than ever before. The biggest problems on humans’ health come from air, water, noise and land pollution. What does these types mean in detail? The major reason of air pollution is cutting down trees. Burning fossil fuels and driving every short distance with the car effects the environment as well. The health effect of air pollution are serious – one third of death from stroke, lung cancer and heard diseases are due to air pollution. The main problem is that the microscopic pollution can slip past our body’s defence. Water pollution is when waste, chemicals or other particles cause a body of water to become harmful to the fish and animals that needs the water to survive. The main problem caused by water pollution is that it kills organism that depend on these water bodies. Dead fish, crabs, dolphins and other animals often wind up on beaches, killed by pollutants in their living environment. Another big problem is air pollution. That is anything that damages or contaminates the land. The effect on human health include breathing disorders, birth defect, skin diseases and cancer. Another potential type of pollution is the so-called “noise pollution”. That refers to the reference of noise (from machines, transportations systems, trains, etc.) in the environment that is very harmful to the mental and physical health if living beings on earth. Hearing lose, raise blood pressure and pulse rates are only some of the main problems by this type of pollution. What can we do against this? First, reduce the number of trips taken in your car. Second, never throw something away, that someone else might be able to use. A third and last tip: Use re-useable shopping bags made of cotton and avoid plastic bags.
We all have to change our behaviour a bit. On the other hand, do we really want to destroy our planet?
3 Antworten
Zeile 3 und 6: the pollution of air, water, land and soil
Z 6: What do these types mean in detail
Z 9: The effects on air pollution on health are serious - one third of deaths … and heart diseases
Z 13: that need (ohne s) water to survive
Z 17: air pollution is anything that contaminates the land?
Z 20 u 21: which is very harmful to the mental and physical health of living beings on earth. Hearing loss, raised blood pressure … some of the main problems caused by this type of pollution
Kein Fehler, aber ein Vorschlag für die Überschrift: The Blue Planet becomes The Plastic Planet
Author, 23th of November 2019
gesprochen: (I was born on the) twenty-third of November 1999.
geschrieben: (I was born on) 23(rd) November 1999. = BE
gesprochen: (I was born on) November the twenty-third 1999.
geschrieben: (I was born on) November 23(rd) 1999. = AE
We create more and more pollution. Air, water, land and soil pollution effect all of us. Can we still manage to save our planet?
We are creating more pollution than ever before. The biggest problems on (Präposition) humans’ health come from (Ausdruck) air, water, noise and land pollution. What does these types (Grammatik) mean in detail? The major reason of (Präposition) air pollution is cutting down trees. Burning fossil fuels and driving every short distance with (Präposition) (---) car effects (Grammatik) the environment as well. The health effect of air pollution are (Grammatik) serious – one third of death (Grammatik) from stroke, lung cancer and heard (RS) diseases are due to air pollution. The main problem is that (---) microscopic pollution can slip past our body’s defence. Water pollution is when (Ausdruck) waste, chemicals or other particles cause a body of water to become harmful to (---) fish and animals that needs (Grammatik) (---) water to survive. The main problem caused by water pollution is that it kills organism (Grammatik) that depend on these water bodies. Dead fish, crabs, dolphins and other animals often wind up on beaches, killed by pollutants in their living environment. Another big problem is air pollution. That is anything that damages or contaminates the land. The effect (Grammatik) on human health include breathing disorders, birth defect (Grammatik), skin diseases and cancer. Another potential type of pollution is the so-called “noise pollution”. That refers to the reference (Wiederholung) of noise (Ausdruck) (from machines, transportations (Grammatik) systems, trains, etc.) in the environment that is very harmful to the mental and physical health if (RS) living beings on earth. Hearing lose (Wort), raise (Wort Grammatik) blood pressure and pulse rates are only some of the main problems (Hier fehlt ein Verb.) by this type of pollution. What can we do against this? First, reduce the number of trips taken in your car (Besser Plural). Second, never throw something (Wort, Grammatik) away (kein Komma) that someone else might be able to use. A third and last tip: Use re-useable shopping bags made of cotton and avoid plastic bags.
We all have to change our behaviour a bit. On the other hand, do we really want to destroy our planet?
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The main problem caused by water pollution is that it kills organism that depend on the water flora and fauna.
Das ist das einzigste, dass ich ändern würde. Sonst hört es sich gut an. 👍