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[...] As a matter of fact, you do not need to be psychologically unstable to say that you do not feel understood. We are complex individuals with a complex mind that is constantly changing and acting different every day. We develop our personalities and our traits as we grow older, making us more approachable in life and more understanding about what is actually happening around us. But, you need to keep in mind that, we never fully open ourselves to other people. You may think, that is not true and you do give your whole self to your loved ones, but let me bring you out of your own bubbled up castle and tell you that it is a false statement you make in your own mind, tricking yourself into thinking that you actually open up your heart to others. You probablly think that the people around you, the ones you are very close with, friends, family members, your lover, your pets, everyone you think you are close with, know you, as a person. Wake up, yourself it’s the only self that actually really knows you. Nobody else will ever understand the way yourself understands you. Nobody is entitled into knowing you. You give pieces of yourself to the outter world, the ones you want others to know about you and acknolwedge you. You never show your whole personality to others, and do you know why you don’t do that? Because you are afraid to be judged and left alone. We have our pieces inside us, that are not the pieces we would like to show. Let me explain it to you. Let’s say you have a loved one that you love very much, does not matter who that person is. You love that person uncondtionally and you would do anything for them. At least, that is what you think. Because you love that person, you activate the chemical reactions bombing you inside your body, which make your dopamin levels rise up, making you a happier person, due to the love and affection you receive from them, you feel loved and very much in love, bubbled up and you behave like an innocent child which is a normal and commmon behaviour when you are in love with someone. At least, that is what you think. At this point, you would do anything to keep this relaitonship going, you are willing to do anything that requires for this relationship to not end. Otherwise, you would fall into depression, self-isolation and self-destruction because you eventually lose something that you loved and made you feel loved. At least, that is what you think. After all, you want that person to love you and continue to love you. So for this, you show your best version of yourself to them, you try the best you can to be the best person in front of them, you try to do better, you try to become a better person. You only show pieces of your personality that are mostly used to introduce yourself to other people. When you go out, when you engage with people, simply when you are around people, when it’S time for you to show and tell. These pieces you show and keep on you are the ones your loved one is aware of. Mostly. You showed your best version and the best pieces of yourself to that individual and that is the major reason why the person fell in love with you. Because yu certainly showed your best side. Nobody would fall in love with you, if you showed your rotten, shored up, abandonded and hated side and the pieces of yourself. Would you? You don’t even show that side of yourself, why would anyone love it? People are attracted to whatever makes them happier. Mostly positive things. Whatever you show to the world, you are not what you think you are. That person is barely you, you make up a persona that you do not even identify as, you use that persona for your every day social life, pretending to be that person, for you in order to suit in and fit in a world we live in, awaiting to be liked. Liked? Think. How can you await to be liked, when you show a self of you, which is fake, made up persona with no soul or bubbly personality? You faked yourself. We do not show our true selves, we show and tell. Your true self, it’s hidden and protected deep inside you. Why? Because it’s yours. It’s yours and it’s sensitive. Image this. You decide to show your true self to somebody. The pieces you have always hidden and never showed to anyone. Now it’s time for you to introduce them to others. These pieces are not made up of love and flowers. These pieces are your biggest nightmares, your demons, your issues with yourself, the pieces you do not show because they are uncontrollable and you know how much in trouble they can get you. But you show them, to the world. — Think. Imagine it. How does that make you feel? What do you think about when I say „your biggest nightmares, yur demons, your issues with yourself“? Do you feel agony? Do you feel phobic? Uncertain? You shouldn’t because they are parts of you, you can not get rid of. Ever. [...]
du solltest genau sagen, was du wissen möchtest über den Text. Hast du ihn geschrieben als eine Hausaufgabe, oder willst du Meinungen hören über den Inhalt?
ich schreibe ein Buch, das ist ein Auszug aus dem Buch. Ich würde gerne wissen wie Leute es finden. Genau, Meinungen hören.
Was für eine Art von Buch soll es denn werden? Fachbuch, Sachbuch, Roman, Geschichte?
Sachbuch eher.
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Also, nachdem ich es nun ein zweitesmal gelesen habe hier meine Meinung dazu:
Der Text erscheint mir wenig strukturiert und dafür recht unklar. Es soll gut klingen, aber erscheint mir wie eine Mischung aus Küchenpsychologie und gewollt philosophisch. Was mir gut gefiel von der Struktur ist der Schluss mit den rhetorischen Fragen.