English vorstellen in der schule

Hallo Leute es ist so das wir morgen uns auf english vorstellen müssen und das es mindestens 2min lang sein soll passt dieser Text ? und könnt ihr mir vielleicht tipps geben ? danke eure Caro :)

First of all i don't like to introduce myself. My name is xxxx but my nickname is xxxx. I was born on 4th of december in xxxheim. I live at the moment in xxxstadt. thats only a small village. I attend the Realschule from Ebermannstadt and my favourite subjects are art, mathematics and Reli. I have 2 Brothers and 2 sisters. My Brother and sister attends this school too. My other two siblings are visting the elementary school. I would to like to tell you something about my hobbies and interests. I like sport for example riding my Bike but i hate footballe. In the rest of my free time i'm surfing in the internet. I often meet friends and go shopping.After school i want to study. My mottos are from nothing comes nothing and nothing is to be taken for granted

ich hoffe ihr könnt mir weiter helfen ;)

Answer 1

[Ellahochzwei]

*At the Moment, I live in xxstadt (Zeitangaben sollten nicht zwischendrin stehen, hört sich falsch an) *Attend ohne s *surfing the internet

Mh, damit du mehr Zeit verbrauchst könntest du ja ausführlicher beschreiben was deine Eltern machen, wie, wann, warum ihr umgezogen seid, warum du die Fächer magst, was deine besten Fähigkeiten sind, was du später studieren willst, welche Bücher, Fehrnsesendungen oder Filme du magst... Und so weiter :)

Ich hoffe ich konnte helfen!

Comments

[dakine84]

bücher/TV-Serien und was du später studieren magst fänd ich persönlich auch besser als z.b. dein Motto

Answer 2

[Koschutnig]

Ein bisschen flüssiger und weniger steif:

First of all I'd 'like to say that I don't really like talking about myself. But since I have to introduce myself - well, here we go: (oder: here you are:)

My name is xxxx, but people call me xxxx. I was born in xxxheim xxx years ago, on the 4th of December. Santa Claus came just two days later, but believe me: I don't really remember him.

At present I live in xxxstadt, which is just a small village xxx km away. Like all of us I'm attending Realschule in Ebermannstadt and my favourite subjects are art, maths and religious education, and PT of course, that's physical training or physical education.

I have 2 brothers and 2 sisters. One of my brothers and one sister are also in this school. but the younger ones still go to elementary school.

I'd also like to tell you something about my hobbies and interests. On the whole, I'm quite fond of sports, for example I like cycling very much, but I hate soccer. During the rest of my spare time I surf on the internet, often meet friends and go shopping. After school I want to study, but I haven't really decided yet what it shall be. My mottoes in life are that nothing comes form nothing - or as the English proverb goes, "You can't make something out of nothing" - and, "Never take anything for granted".

Answer 3

[CSSGeri]

Erstmal die verbesserungen ;D

1. THE 4th of
2. at the moment i live
3. my brother and my sister are attending
4. I would like to tell you
5. I hate soccer (Football ist american football)
6. sag lieber spare time statt free time, kommt besser ;)
7. nothing should be taken

So, bei small village könntest du vielleicht noch sagen wo das in der nähe ist. Ich würde vor das "I would tell you sth about my hobbies" noch ein "now" setzen so als kleine Einleitung. Außerdem könntest du noch was über haustiere erzählen, wenn du welche hast.

LG und ich hoffe, dass ich dir weiterhelfen konnte Julian

Answer 4

[Malaful]

so ist es richtig : I was born on the 4th...At the moment I live in... My brother and my sister attend..My other two siblings visit the... I would like to tell you.. I like sports, for example cycling but I hate football. Das mit den Mottos weiss ich nicht ..

Answer 5

[Ladinax]

Hallo Keksiii100, ich denke das der Text die 2 Minuten Gut überbrücken kann ;) Viel Erfolg. Ladi.